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I want to preface this by saying, I am not trying to hate. My intention is to give thoughtful, honest feedback so that every story I rate has something the author can walk away from and both appreciate and work on. If I sound rude that is entirely accidental, I'm only intending to give helpful, honest criticisms and praises.

I really liked having a story from the hive's perspective, not many people go that route and I commend you for it. I will be blunt though, I personally got bogged down in a lot of the names and few grammar slip ups here and there made this a difficult read for me. I feel like if this were a full book then all of the names for things could've been spread out a bit and easier to digest, but as a thousand word short story it just made it a hard read. Still, you've got a really cool concept on your hands and I'd love to see it stretched out into a full length story.