Boo! 👻
I've been scrolling through the Yandere tag for a while-- and eventually, I stumbled here! I plan to make some notes and remarks about this game for funsies (and in case u guys need some feedback)
^ I'm saying this bc I already found some small errors
(Mild spoilers, but dw there's no meaningful spoilers)
1) When I click the button to save, it brings me to the load screen (arrow pointing south)
When I chose the load button (arrow pointing north) it led me to the save screen instead
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2) Text often doesn't fit the box
it's not a critical issue, but I just thought it was noticeable enough to mention
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3) Last but not least, there was just a weird janky/funky feel to Louhi when he changed expressions
I got this sense that maybe different people were drawing him, bc his hair's shading, clothes shading, and collarbone were artistically inconsistent
they all had the same lineart/outline, but the coloring was just slightly off (the red cross over his chest also changed to a darker red in some sprites)
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Just booted it up and I can already tell it'll a good one😼
love the interface and pixelated look, and another point to mention is how the characters (albeit with some messy lines on their clothes lolololol) actually look really cool!
I'd say you got a good eye for colour comp 😽 (as an artist myself I admire the way you drew the charas)
I'd say a disappointment o mine was that the text boxes fit the text size/length. It looked janky when there was a real long paragraph of dialogue, and then the next frame it's just a real small box. You get what I mean?
Uhhh and some bits were missing words like right here, I think you meant to say his **eyes** gleamed
The color of the text was tan (a pretty light color) which blended in with the box, i'd say it wasn't too hard to see but still a bit funky to look at xd
But, i do think **it's not that bad** in campirson to other possibilities, since when you hover ur mouse over it, the bg of the box is dark again so u can see the text. Funky, but it works . it's an **Odd choice**
Nayway, I'm not trying to be some sort of game connaisseur and judge you, I just wanna point out the super cool bits of the game and some things i thought were funny lmfao
i rate it Awesome!!! 1 million/10
I really love the concept: rewinding time, a suspicious TV channel, and a host with uncertain intentions.
The overall visual design really sent me. It was really awesome!! I very much enjoyed playing this and I can't wait for what the future holds ❤
Although, I noticed some weird things while I was playing...
For example, there is an odd space between the punctuation and the word. From the context of the sentence, the word is "cliché" isn't it?
I think it might just be a typo, so no worries!
Additionally, there's also a weird moment where the game refers to Liotte by the player's name. In this case, I've named myself Damon. This may differ from other users, however, I found that the game implied that I was the one who came from the TV. With the context of the game's setting, this is false.
Lastly, less of an issue and more of a personal word choice... What does NG stand for? I thought it may have stood for CG, but the N in place of the G threw me off.
This demo was so unique!
The title screen was constructed really nicely, too. ((My only issue with it is that you can't really get back to the title screen and go back to selecting Acts since it always just restarts your game/coins))
I greatly like the sprites; the animated mouths and expressions were très beaux!! ((It's just kinda funky how the nose blush disappears when they blink lol))
Anyway, really great game. It really set my standards high for Vns lmao
Hello! I apologize for my late reply. I was busy taking screenshots of any moments which occurred to have a mistake: Typo, odd CG, incorrect font color, and improper grammar.
There are many things that I have taken note of by analyzing the text and imagery. Which is why I present to you my discord, ((removed)) . This message would drag on for far too long if I noted *every* small detail I found.
This image happened to show up both times I replayed this scene. As I have stated in my previous message, I am uncertain if this was intentional or an error.
Improper spelling and grammar
"I try to speak up using all my strenght"
I bolded the word which was misspelled. Additionally, you may also see that there is no punctuation.
There are other occasions that I have found to have minor mistakes, such as these...
The font color does not indicate someone is speaking, however, Seth later replies to this 'inner dialogue'. This implies that it was spoken aloud.
When Agni is speaking to the Protagonist, she is portrayed to be a teasing and smug character. It wouldn't come to be a surprise if she used slang while speaking, although, I find that the words are not similar to slang such as "t'is" or "it's". Furthermore, it has become apparent to me that this game often makes mistakes such as leaving out punctuation.
Hence why I believe "t's" is a typo.
