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Nice job!

I liked that the game has a strong component of thing that are written, since this is a game based on the work of a writer. Splitting the pages and build ingon previous images to find more and more material in the page is interesting, and I would really like to try it!  I liked very much also the mix of real life and the thing that are in the book, and how the book become real. This part is very fascinating.

To choose among a list of actions seems very original. "Fate senza di me" is nice, but I do not understan why somebody should choose it. At the same time; what is the real objective of "Sta diventando un’ossessione" and "Mi prendo una pausa"? Nothing happens if obsession arrive to 10? these scenes are beautiful from an estetic point of view, but do not modify anything in the process of the game... Probably I have lost some detail...

 I don't know if you could test the game. I wonder if the choice of the points and how to increase them is ok in order to have a balanced game that is not too short or too long, but the idea that the end can be decided by someone that is very optimistic about the result of the dice is also fascinating.

I think that after a test on the points, the game is almost ready to be played.

Very interesting idea and even the style. I like te idea to write things and to build the story on something that has been written. I like that everything happens in a city, and I would suggest to avoid any idea correlated with open spaces, woods, mountains and other natural environments.

I like very much the suggestions about personas and lugares; you could include more suggestions: objects, sentiments...

On the contrary, the rules about biforcation, the management of the story, how the role of master is changed, what exactly people can or cannot do, are still not very clear, and probably you are working on that. As MrValis I am not sure what you mean when yous say "the chapter may preserve the unity of space or time, but not both"

Probably the game does not deserve to be played in more than one day. 

Finally, the end of the game seems a little "soft"; but again, I think you wanted to do so

Ciao; ho appena scaricato anche il tuo gioco, sono curioso di leggerlo con calma. L'idea del libro con dettagli sempre più precisi che poi passano nella realtà è bellissima

I have downloaded your rules. The initial idea seems  to be very interesting. I will be back to you