Hey, so apparently, starting from the beginning makes....idk how to explain this but it just repeats the same lines right after they're shown sometimes, just slightly different?
This happens when you meet Phillip and when you meet the remnant for the first time, there might've been more that I missed, but I simply do not know if they were intended or not to notice those.
There are quite a few errors regarding scripting apparently, choosing to go to the forsaken village seems to work, until a few pages after when it mentions Asahi leaning against a cave wall, even though a barely standing cottage was the refuge of choice there.
Speaking of forsaken village, that one also has a mention of you wielding a bow during the fight, regardless of the weapon you chose.
If I could make 2 little suggestions, could you maybe make the player a bit slower as they get heavier? Feels a little bit floaty as it stands right now (just a tiny smidge to be noticeable).
My second suggestion is more of a detail rather than gameplay related. Could the steps of the character be either louder or sound heavier as they get bigger? Think that'd add some more.... atmosphere(?) to the game, really.
In all seriousness, the game as it stands is phenomenal. Gameplay is engaging, mechanics work pretty well and, from the available portion at least, is designed pretty well around the current limitations.
All in all, a very promising project! Will be keeping my eye on this one for sure.
Honestly, that button was the first thing I tried and it really took me by surprise what you did there lol.
But don't worry too much about the grammar, just a handful of words at most that I thought could use some change, nothing major but overall I did like how you wrote and paced each scene so far.
Aaand just like that, you got yourself a rent free space in my mind, I'll definitely check it out when it's here!
I am liking what I'm reading so far, but one thing that I'm noticing is a lot of disparity between the calm and collected options/responses and the scenes right after almost being a emotional breakdown of the character.
While I can understand those responses, being a almost hopeless setting with little to no way out in sight, I can't help but feel a bit confused about the choices presented. Does the MC have some sort of condition in this story that isn't explained at the start or am I just not really understand how they feel about it?
It might just be me being a moron here (wouldn't be the first time), but it kinda bothers me in a sense that this is happening.
Ren'py games on browser tends to run like shit (not saying that this one would, but it's just better to avoid it if one can), so it's better to either just download it on desktop or use joiplay if you're on a phone.
Honestly, I think it'd be cooler if you left this page up and label it as [PROTOTYPE]/[VERY VERY EARLY ALPHA] or something, a sorta way to preserve history on the development of the VN. But if deleting is your ultimate wish, there's nothing but respect for it too!
On a side note, can we talk about that tongue emote? 🤔🤔
