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It looks like an awesome one session adventure that you could slot into any campaign (especially a hell based one) near or at the start. The adventure would work very well for a party that's focused on asking questions and exploring. Though, on the other hand I would be hesitant to run this if I know my players would be a "punch first, ask questions later" type of group. 

I think there's a really great concept here, but it might have worked better if you kept it to one page of rules. The character creation bit feels kinda tacked on, just because 'you're supposed to have character creation in rpgs'

I really really like the "roll to see how many words you can use" mechanic, and that it's always smaller numbers. I've found with larger word limits (say. 25 words for example) it's harder to keep track of how much you have left to say.

If you think it's bad now, you should have seen the first draft!

But in all seriousness, thanks for the feedback. I'm not exactly a graphic designer.

Thanks! When making it, I figured that with 2 pages I should really strongly focus on one thing. So I focused on the style and setting, and everything else was built to fit into that, and add to it.

It is not just good, it is the best height.

All part of my secret plan to destroy the internet.

Nice work!

It would be nice if the camera were a little further out though, I kept getting shot by enemies I couldn't see because they were just off screen. 

It was pretty fun! I really liked the movement. (even though it was a little funky. We all need some funk.)

Yeah that's the bug that made me throw my hands up in the air and be like EA...