Greetings ViNovella,
I read on your Patreon page that you started a new visual novel and handed over the completion of Fetish Locator to another team but what you didn't mention is that you didn't care about Fetish Locator anymore because you didn't even notice how much the new team screwed up what you started so let me explain it to you:
1) Where the fuck does this money prize come from and where the fuck has gone the retention program which was so central to the plot?
The protagonist started playing Fetish Locator because he hoped it would help him meet his dream-girl Lydia and as soon as he got what he wanted from it, he tried to get rid of it however Fetish Locator showed him the picture in which he started jerking off on the bed right next to a sleeping Lydia, blackmailed him into keeping playing the game and put him into the retention program with specific challenges and punishments, this retention program is the core of the plot in week one and week two.
And yet, the plot was entirely erased and rewritten in week three, breaking its consistency and credibility, the retention program and its plot of blackmail somehow magically vanished after week two and was replaced by an insufferably lame and boring "plot" about a money prize, week three tried to make us forget the blackmail of the retention program and believe that the protagonist voluntarily chose to keep playing the game and risk his relationship with his dream-girl out of greed because he lusted after the big money prize, which, as I already stated, is lame and boring, this new "plot" which replaced the original plot not only is pathetic because it ruins the consistency and credibility of week one and week two, that is to say that it sabotages the story, but it also doesn't hold a candle to the intriguing plot of blackmail and coercion of the original retention program, the protagonist didn't voluntarily chose to keep playing the game out of greed for the big money prize, he was blackmailed and coerced into keeping playing the game out of fear that Fetish Locator would ruin the reputation of its players and that was infinitely more intriguing and interesting.
2) The respectable protagonist of week one and week two suddenly turned into a pathetic psychopath in week three.
The original protagonist in week one and week two was a gentleman who respected women and wasn't subjected to urges to oppress them to feel secure about his manhood, the only woman that he was rough with was the judge and that is only because it is her request.
In week three, the protagonist out of nowhere and for no reason starts to strangle all women he fucks and even attempts to drown Min in her pool just so he can cum as if he no more feels secure about his manhood enough to cum if he doesn't threaten the life of his women, in other words, the respectable gentleman protagonist of week one and week two who felt safe with women and didn't need to systematically dominate them for him to feel a man suddenly out of nowhere turned into a pathetic lame excuse of a man who feels so insecure with women that he systematically needs to oppress them to feel safe enough to cum in week three.
I didn't mind when he pretended to rape the judge and Hana on her boat because they specifically requested it but when he started to actually behave like a rapist with every woman even though they didn't request it, I started to feel disgusted of him because all I was seeing was a man who could no more feel secure about his manhood enough to cum if he didn't take women by force, that was truly pathetic and disgusting to watch and I was half-expecting to discover that he was brainwashed during his sleep between sunday of week two and monday of week three because his personality dramatically changed within a night for no reason.
To be clear, the protagonist of week three is NOT the same protagonist of week one and week two, they are two different people, their personality is not the same and I was half-expecting to discover in the story that the protagonist of week one and week two was abducted and replaced by an evil twin.
3) LC or NTR?
Week three starts with a choice between two realities: one reality in which Lydia Cox is truly a virgin, Jerome truly tried to rape her, Pete is truly not involved in Fetish Locator, and Lydia is allowed a happy ending, and one reality in which Lydia is a dominatrix slut who loves to be surrounded by cocks, Jerome is her submissive slave, Pete is also one of her slaves for reasons which elude my comprehension because he would be more likely to make her his bitch, and Lydia ends in jail no matter what, even if the visual novel gives you choices to cover for her and not talk about Fetish Locator in the police station, her ending is always the same, which makes me wonder why do you even bother to give choices to cover for her if my choices don't change anything?
I really have to talk about something which made me laugh hard about this choice of reality.
Before you choose between the reality of Lydia Cox's happy ending or the NTR reality... wait, actually there is something else that I need to tell before I continue, I need to talk about the very concept of NTR.
What is NTR? No, really, what is NTR? NTR doesn't mean anything because there are the netorare and the netori so how are we supposed to know which of the two NTR means? Is it NTR as in netorare or is it NTR as in netori? That always pisses me off every time developers state that "this game contains NTR" or "this visual novel contains NTR" because that doesn't tell me if they mean netorare or/and netori?!
We use japanese names because who else other than japanese people would be insane enough to invent such concepts as "Aaah, that turns me on when my lover cheats on me, betrays my trust and makes me look like a fool, oh yeah, I feel so degraded and humiliated, I'm going to cuuuuuuuum!" or "Mmmmmm, why would I fuck single people readily available when it is so much more thrilling to take what belongs to someone else, oh yeah, the guarded fruit tastes so much better than the free fruit!".
Well, to be fair, I can understand the appeal of the forbidden fruit, it is just like the story of the Garden of Eden when God told Adam and Eve "You are free to taste everything BUT this one fruit there.", I mean it was obvious that this would be the one fruit who would attract the most curiosity and if God truly didn't want Adam and Eve to taste this fruit then why the fuck did he include it into their garden in the first place? Well, of course, like every religious story, the story of the Garden of Eden is a fiction designed to teach a lesson to people who are told the story and the lesson of the story of the Garden of Eden is well-known: The forbidden fruit is the most appealing of all.
So I can understand the appeal of netori. However you can't change my mind that if you are turned on by the idea of being cheated on, back-stabbed, betrayed, lied to, made a fool, degraded, humiliated, then you need to solve some psychological unresolved issue because it is not sane to enjoy being betrayed, netorare is a form of masochism.
And I am NOT masochist NEITHER sadist so when you warn me that your story will contain NTR, that doesn't mean anything, you need to tell if your story will contain netorare or/and netori.
For example, in week one, we catch Kevin jerking off while spying on his sister Chloe getting fucked by someone else then he explains that he and his sister are lovers and that he is turned on by watching her getting fucked by someone else and therefore he is a netorare.
Then he invites us to fuck his sister while he watches and jerk off and if we accept, we are a netori.
Also, we get a chance to grow intimate with Min while she is Antony's girlfriend and even lead them to break up and keep her entirely to ourselves in week two, we take someone else's lover, this is netori.
At the start of week three, we have to choose between two alternate realities, one of which is labelled "NTR" and once more, we are not told which kind of NTR we risk to be exposed to, netori or netorare, sigh, there are so many creators who state that their work contains NTR and so few of them who actually specify netori or/and netorare so every time I read "this contains NTR", I already know in advance that this will be crap because the creator doesn't actually know what they are talking about if they don't even know there are two different kinds of NTR and the creators who actually know their subject know to specify netori or/and netorare.
And I really need to ask: Where did this fucking NTR come from anyway?! I know it came from Japan, we use japanese names and only japanese people would be insane enough to make fantasies of cheating such a big deal that it became an entire type of porn content, I know all that but what I don't understand is that until a few years ago, I had never ever heard of NTR anywhere then a few years ago, BAM, it was suddenly everywhere from nowhere, it is as if the entire world all of a sudden out of nowhere fantasized hard about cheating, I even read people complaining to creators that their works don't contain NTR and I was like "Are you serious? You are complaining that the creators make you experience romantic and sexy stories which don't break your heart, make you feel back-stabbed, betrayed, hurt? What's your fucking problem?! You can't enjoy not being hurt, are you fucking masochists?!" and the answer was yes, people who enjoy NTR are definitely masochists, I know all that but what I can't explain to myself is why so many people suddenly turned masochists a few years ago, why did I never ever heard of NTR until a few years ago then all of a sudden it was everywhere from nowhere?
Sigh, so that was about the very concept of NTR but now I want to resume where I left off before I diverted: the first choice of week three.
This failure of a week three starts with a choice between two realities, the Lydia Cox's reality in which she is a voyeur virgin and has a chance for happiness with the protagonist and the NTR reality which...ugh, I don't even have words to express how much the team responsible for week three utterly screwed up this version of the story because just like every creator who uses the name "NTR" without actually specifying which kind of NTR they talk about, the team responsible of week three doesn't know their subject and failed at every level so much that I genuinely doubt that the original creators of week one and week two even read week three because I can't imagine that they read it and didn't notice how it ruins the entire story, breaks the consistency and credibility built in week one and week two, changes everything for no reason, talk about subjects that they are clueless about, shit on the plot, screw their shit, then eat it and shit it again before they flush it to the toilets and call it done.
Literally nothing in week three can even hold a candle to week one and week two, week one and week two started intriguing, exciting, interesting, thrilling, great and promising, then week three arrived and wasted everything.
But that's not the subject here, I diverted again as I always do but I really want to talk about the choice between LC and NTR.
What I want to share is how hard the comments of the creators made me laugh to tears!
Let me explain, at the start of week three, when you receive the box with the two cock-cages which determine in which reality the story will switch into, there is a note which reads as follow: "These twin cages are almost identical, but your choice will have a drastic impact on your life. The first is known as Love Conquers the cage. I commend this cage to you, if you are weak in will and hold fast to your humanity. The second is called the Needlessly Tight Restriction. This I commend for those safe in their manhood, or willing to risk being traumatized."
I wish you would have seen how hard I laughed when I read that!
Let me explain: According to this note, if you are not into NTR then you are weak in will and hold fast to your humanity, which is a contradiction in itself because it accuses you to have a weak will and at the same time to hold onto your humanity, but how can you hold onto your humanity if you have a weak will? You have to be strong-willed to not let yourself being stripped of your humanity and there already is a netorare in this story, remember, I told you about earlier, there is someone who enjoys watching his sister-lover getting fucked by someone else, of course I'm referring to Kevin, the character who has a netorare fetish, now tell me, when you think about Kevin, do you picture a strong-willed man or do you picture a weak cuckold who watches other people fuck his sister? Actually, how does the protagonist think about Kevin? Does he think "Damn, what a man! He wants me to fuck his lover, how I wish I was as strong-willed as he is!" or does he think "Holy shit, I'm fucking his lover while he watches us and jerks off, that's so fucked up, how can he actually enjoy that?!" and even Kevin calls himself a cuckold which he acknowledges his own submissiveness so don't you think this note which claims that if you are not into NTR then you are weak in will is a bad joke?
Then it continues claiming that people into NTR are safe in their manhood, oh how hard I laughed my ass off to this pathetic self-convincing bullshit! I mean, it is obvious that they are trying to convince themselves more than they try to convince us with such bullshit, once again, think about the character who has a netorare fetish, Kevin, do you get the impression that this cuckold feels safe in his manhood when he requests the protagonist to knock up his lover because "having his lover knocked up by a bull is the ultimate thrill for a cuckold"? Does that make you think "Oh wow! Such a manly man safe in his manhood! Kevin is definitely the most manly of all men!" or does that make you think "Holy shit, does this man have no self-esteem at all that he steeps so low as to beg another man to knock up his lover because he doesn't feel manly enough to do it himself?!"