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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Representation of Theme | #2 | 4.833 | 4.833 |
| Functionality | #4 | 4.111 | 4.111 |
| Overall | #4 | 4.078 | 4.078 |
| Engagement | #5 | 3.833 | 3.833 |
| Visual Design | #5 | 4.222 | 4.222 |
| Gameplay | #6 | 3.389 | 3.389 |
Ranked from 18 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Judge feedback
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- Thanks for being willing to share such a personal story. The erase mechanic was an effective tool in your storytelling, I think most effective when you inverted it to be filling into. The two juxtaposed was a solid effect. The pages where the player must erase the entire page significantly slow down the pace. You might consider varying the size of the "brush" depending on how many pixels must be erased. It was a very good call to not require all of them to be painted. I'm guessing you set it to 80-90% of the total? Pixel art was well executed. A few tweaks to your interactions, otherwise well done!
- An excellent use of the theme to tell a touching narrative story. The gameplay is fairly simple and it's not immediately clear what to do at first, and there's not much to it. It fits the narrative really well, though.
- This was just great. What a creative way to tell your story. And I absolutely loved how erasing became revealing! The music really help to set the feels as well. Not sure if you're actually looking for feedback on something like this. But if you are, I would say that the amount of erasing got to be a bit much. So much so that I was starting to lose the narrative. Possible make erasing "faster" or maybe even better maintain the text somehow so the narrative remains? Regardless, great job!
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Autobiographicals always draw you in because they feel so personal. Thanks for sharing your story through the jam. Great use of the theme!
Solid game and message. I enjoyed erasing the screen as a part of revelation in the story. The story developed as it was played. Interesting concept, good clear narration.
Solid game and message. I enjoyed erasing the screen as a part of revelation in the story. The story developed as it was played. Interesting concept, good clear narration.
This was really touching and engaging! The gameplay and voice over matched each other so well, and the music really set a slightly somber, but empowering mood! This was a beautiful take on the theme! Amazing work!
Wow, awesome use of the theme and a very creative way to tell a story!!
Always nice to see someone put their own feelings through the ol' inspiration machine.
I realize this is less of a game than an interactive experience. It looks and sounds great, and the erasing function is good. I noticed if you start erasing too soon it triggers the timer for the next "page", which sometimes overlaps the voice lines.
From an artistic perspective I think that it could be an easy and fun way to add to the effect with different shaped brushes relevant to the memories. Like an eyeliner pen shape for the part where you mention makeup. Good job!
<3 Thanks for this. I teared up a bit at the end.
Ahh, fantastic. Really good idea/use of theme, well executed. Nice art/music/sound. Fascinating use of 2nd person; was that always the voice, or did you switch to that? It might be worth playing around with if you decide to extend the game.
Thanks! I wrote about half in 1st person before I ended up switching to 2nd. Good catch!
An interesting way to tell a story. I do have to say though that the screens where you have to erase the entire screen feels like a bit of a turn away, as the gameplay mechanic already kind of felt like a chore to me. On the other note, on the screens where you fill in instead of erase, that felt like it had a lot of impact on storytelling in a game about erasing, so great job on that idea!
Very beautiful and personal entry. Great stuff.
This was beautiful! I loved everything about this! I love the erasing mechanic with the pictures and the dialogue was also paced nicely! My only nitpick is the erasing was sometimes too drawn out!
Thanks so much! I think if I were going to update it I might increase the brush size based on resolution (in the current build, a bigger screen means more erasing is required)
I think that would be a great idea!