Hey! I did a review of your entry via video. I posted it on the Jam discord but appreciate everyone might not be on there. Here's the video timestamp for your entry: https://youtu.be/1-aLhBdNCKE?t=14305

I really like the sense of foreboding that really comes across from the groans of the bass. It feels very... old and raw, which I love.
I do agree it could use something just a bit higher frequency somewhere to add in just a bit of brightness, even if it were just a few hits here and there to add some anticipation.

Like Kale mentioned, the bass overpowers the cello a bit because of its power.

One thing that might work as an alternative arrangement for this, is playing the bass part on the lower register of the cello, the upper part higher on the cello and then later maybe adding some plucked bass to give power to the low end, but not to overpower the cello (just a quick idea I had, not sure if it would work😅).

But other than that, good job!

Super well recorded, love the textures of the instrument coming through!

Would have loved to hear a tiny bit of extra high frequency content, plus everything felt a tiny bit too condensed in the lows.  Perhaps less notes and maybe more stereo information.  

The fact that you're using real instrumentation is awesome. The structure and the composition itself is nice in terms of progression.

I know one thing I do since I play a lot of real instruments is improvise a lot and then record over the improvisation. Improvisation is the way to practice composing with repetition, where you have this constant feedback of what sounds good and what doesn't.

The clustering of the chords starts to clash. The more bass-oriented the instrument, the fewer notes you want close together, it makes it muddy.

Mix wise, it definitely could use reverb and spacing, especially with all of the bass. I'd say the tone of it to me felt somber and heavy.

The fact that you have those instruments and can play them is a huge asset. I really *really* want to hear you loosen up with your instrument and make some stuff in a more loose fashion to develop that more instantaneous musical intuition.

The vibe you set here is really cool, so I'm definitely excited to hear more.

Edit: the cello has such a big range that I would use that as its core strength, and really continue to improvise on the instrument.

Thats really nice that you recorded real instruments for this track,  very moody and gritty. those are nice chord progression. I think it would sound amazing using the whole strings spectrum instead of spacing everything on the lower registrer.

Liked the long introduction. It feels like a calm hike, though, in the presence of a big Mountain Spirit or another old Being.