I AM RATING THESE ALL THESE JAM SUBMISSIONS RELATIVE TO ONE ANOTHER. THERE ARE HIGH HIGHS AND LOW LOWS BUT PLEASE DON’T TAKE THIS TOO PERSONALLY, AFTERALL, WE ALL ONLY HAD A MONTH.

Story (2):

It’s a short story that feels nice and satisfying but sort of incomplete. Had everyone else done shorter stories like this one then the score would’ve gone up. The way it tells the story was neat except for the sudden perspective change at the end.

Presentation (1):

NeveN is rather minimalistic VN so I wasn’t expecting much. Which isn’t a bad thing because that minimalism does mean they have very consistent monthly updates. So it’s a give-and-take situation.

Doesn’t do anything exciting.

Creativity (1):

It’s pretty run-of-the-mill when it comes to MY WOLF stories.

Total (4):

My overall score seems appropriate given the fact the team did give themselves half the amount of time as the rest of the Jammers and also still stayed on schedule for their main project. That last point is big, because everyone else who had a main project, took a break from it for this Jam.

Had they had put in all effort like the other Jammers, I think their overall score would’ve doubled at minimum, alas, time is finite resource.

Honestly, my main issue with this is the proverbial blue-balling. We don't get the resolution to the built up tension. We're looking for that release-- what is it Basil will say to Etienne at the park? And then bam, fade to black.

It's a simple tale of romance, but the media-res telling helps heighten the desire to see the ending even more (which is an issue when we don't get the payoff).

Don't know if the Dragon friend is providing much to the narrative either. He's a means to have Etienne reflect, but would not etienne be the kind of character to replay over the issues over and over in his head regardless? He needed perhaps a bit more integration, to take him from feeling superfluous to necessary to the narrative.

I do think the characterization was strong though. Really showing off the anxiety, the means of trying to deal with it through the uh, coping methods? Whatever the correct term is for those behavioral techniques that would be taught by like a therapist.

But yeah, main issue is unresolved conflict. Can't believe you'd blueball us like that. Still nice though, for the length it was.

it's short and simple

Not bad. Short and sweet; really doesn't overstay its welcome, and there is some pretty effective character work done via small details. The non-linear structure elevates the story, which is pretty standard stuff otherwise – there is a nice sense of tension and momentum to how the plot develops. The presentation felt a little lacking, however, and it's not the most creative interpretation of the provided assets, either.