Play book
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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Flow & Clarity | #41 | 3.256 | 3.320 |
| Adherence to Theme | #47 | 3.059 | 3.120 |
| Concepts & Originality | #48 | 3.373 | 3.440 |
| Overall | #49 | 3.229 | 3.293 |
Ranked from 25 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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This was a good read
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Interesting start for a character! Some minor spelling errors (waist vs waste), but a compelling beginning for sure!
nicely written, tight set piece. I thought you were going for daemon possession at the end when the Inquisitor came in rather than recruitment, but sounds like this would make a great opening chapter for a Grimdark Detective story.
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I love the idea of a daemon possession!
Nice twist at the end! The interaction between Brookes and the Sergeant really sets the tone. The grimdark vibe comes through well, though the story feels a bit familiar in terms of setting and plot. Nice job on keeping the dialogue crisp!
Thanks! I had an outline idea then did some research as TBH I don't know enough of the in-depth lore etc. for OPR / 40k Inquisition, which I would have liked to include. Even though i wanted to add more, I ran out of time unfortunately. So I kept the setting to the one location and sprinkled in some lore :)
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Nice twist on the theme for the ending.
Thanks! I appreciate you taking the time to comment :)