You got lots of the lingo down (did you serve by chance?) but the narrative needs work. I like the thrust of the story and where you’re going with it, but there are some elements that need fleshed out. Overall, not a bad story. Fits the theme of grim dark, and the main character makes it work with what he’s got giving you the “creative resources” bit. Needs some editing- which I think you can do before the timer is up. Love the pics of the minis. It’s apparent you do the hobby as the hobby is intended to be done- a fellow gamer after my own heart.
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I did serve by the way. Oh and you are right elements are missing. That was deliberate as I tried to work within the word count constraint. I agree it could be better with more editing but I am fighting a nasty sinus infection and do not have any more energy for it. Next Jam I will be better prepared. I had one beta reader to help with the editing so there was that. I am also going to add to the story in the next Jam making it a series kind of thing. I mean what happened to Sgt Wong? Will he make it through Storm Trooper Selection course?