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Very interesting premise! I love sci-fi, especially with settings that first appear mysterious and involve A.I.s that potentially operate under dubious morality. My favorite part of this story was actually the start, before we meet Jake. I found those sections were the most interesting and provided a good view into life on the ship. Towards the end, however, things felt a bit rushed and I found myself looking for more answers. That said, writing a story of this length in a month is incredibly difficult, and the fact you wrote as much as you did, alongside coding, is incredible! With a little bit of polish, this story could be incredible!

I did also notice that there were some shifts from second person POV to first person POV that were a bit jarring at times, alongside a few formatting errors (like "/" showing up) and issues where I wasn't able to click choices due to errors (notably  occurring down the branch of resisting the voice in the pod and the stasis pod area where you check on the woman who works there). Other than those minor issues, loved the game and found the story quite fascinating! Would love to give it a try again if it's updated in the future. 

Thank you! Really glad you enjoyed it.

I do agree with you concerning the last part feeling rushed. It kinda came together in like a week. Even with going through it multiple times, I can see how it would still feel more like a draft. I had actually planned to have more, especially after taking with Jake, but I ran out of time :/ I am currently working on my other big project, but I've been toying with the idea of continuing it. 

When you talk about the swtich of POV, is it about the text in italic?

About the errors, on which day did you have issues with the voice in your pod (first, second or both)? And the the one in the stasis pod, was it during your first encounter? Do you have by any chance the error notifications?

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No problem!

Ah yeah I feel that - I found myself cutting out parts of my own game due to time restraints. Your game was one of the longest I've read, text-wise, so I definitely understand not being able to finish everything in a month (especially if you're working solo).  As for the POV switching, some of it occurred out of the italics which I assumed was either a mistake/formatting problem. 

The pod errors persisted regardless of the day I tried to stay in bed - it wasn't giving me the option to continue, and I actually brought up stats a few times in order to progress before it looped me back a few messages. The option it wouldn't let me click on in the stasis area was this:  "[[Knock on the door behind which Cenisa locked herself. If you are going to wait, you’d father have a companion.|action][$action = 1][44 -=5]]"

 

Yeah it's probably some formatting issue then :P I should look into that at some point.

Aight, well the second issue is an easy fix. I'll just reupload the file in a min. The one not letting you go through it a bit more weird. I tested it and it is working just fine on my end (I tried both my file and on itch for mobile). Were you trying to click on the actual text or in the space between the letters/line? If you are on a computer, the link should move to italics before you click on it. If it still doesn't work, can you send me your savefile @ crimsonrosewhitelily@gmail.com so I can take a look? 

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Actually, I think I figured the second one out - I clicked on the in-text hyperlink (originally thought there was no hyperlink to continue since it was in a different place) and it's working just fine now! Was just a bit difficult to spot due to the text to continue/progress being linked in the actual paragraph, as opposed as a separate option. 

Aaaaah I think I see where it is then. Yeah, I should figure out a better way. Maybe adding an arrow icon that does the same thing or something.

Thanks!

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Oh yeah that'd definitely help - No problem!