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I love the premise of this. The concept of a goblin striving earnestly to be a really good Knight is hilarious. If I am unflinchingly honest, though, I don't think this story lived up to the premise. I was expecting more of a farce, or at least some comedy arising from how a goblin, with a very different cultural perspective, understands the demands of knighthood and chivalry. (You had the beginnings of this, such as with Shinsplint emphasizing scent in how he perceives the world, but it didn't go anywhere.) There isn't even a great deal of slapstick going on (which, again, a nine-men-v-one-goblin fight seems to invite). Basically I was expecting to laugh, and I only kinda chuckled.

Again, it's a great premise, and the story is well-written from a technical standpoint. I'd suggest that you rework it to take better advantage of the unique and entertaining possibilities available with the idea of a goblin striving for knighthood.

I guess I'm not sure how to incorporate this feedback into my writing - it sounds like you just wanted to read a different story about different goblins than the ones I wanted to write about? (Or the humor didn't land for you, which is fair). 

I mean, that's a fair assessment. :)

In all honesty, thank you - your reply drew me up short, and I had to reflect a little on why that was. I was letting my expectations get the better of me. I have a personal rule about approaching art for what it is (as opposed to what I think it should be). I didn't follow that rule here. I'm not sure what happened. I may have been having an off day?

So really I'm left with, the story was very well written, and Shinsplint is a charming character to engage with.

Thank you for your kind words - it was actually your entry in the last Writing Jam that inspired me to inject a little humor into my entry this time around.

That means a lot - I'm really glad you found Midnight Rites inspiring in that way. Thank *you* for your patience - I am sorry that I forgot myself and didn't give your story a fair read the first time around.