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I really loved this take on havoc, and the story has really good bones. My one critique is that the POV is a little inconsistent. In some parts you are writing in past tense, in others you are writing in present tense. Likewise the perspective is a tad confusing, it mostly reads from the perspective of the cultists but there are some sentences where the narrator does not know what they're thinking and other times where the narrator does. 

I thoroughly enjoyed the story though, and with a little more polish this could be truly great!

Thank you, I think that is some very good insight. Yes, I did change the perspective a lot over the course of writing it. My initial idea was to write from the pov of an inquisitor but then I realised I really wanted to showcase the motivation of the followers of War. But my time was running out. I'm glad I sent it out though, I have learned a lot from the experience and the feedback!

Of course! Always better to finish something than to stop halfway. That's always something to be celebrated! I had the same struggles with the deadline, haha.