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It was a fun read and I enjoyed the story. The world-building helped this story feel like a small part of something larger. I will say though, next time read your story out loud and that will help iron out some of the less obvious kinks. 

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Thank you for the feedback :). 

Yes, I noticed for example that a few sentences are to long.