Oh my Lord at the atmosphere, I could almost tasted the air of that asylum. The characters, the setting, the prose, all deserving of a chef's kiss. It's weakest point by far is adherence to theme, but even then I think it passes that category with flying colors. A wonderful story altogether, well done.
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Very high praise thank you! I have relayed your comments to my daughter who really appreciated the fact that people were taking the time to read, both kids have definitely benefited from all the constructive comments from the jams they have written in and are improving incrementally here, but it has really helped them a lot in schoolwork with time management and getting concise ideas out under tight constraints!