I get what you mean, you're right! The goal of the game is more on the narrative than the challenge itself. To get the different endings and so. But I'm going to work on how to make that clearer :) Thank you for your nice comment! :)
The goal is more a narrative one, really. But it needs lots of polish! I agree with you it could be clearer, we'll think about how to work that out :) Thanks for your nice comment!
This was fun, I got the right weight the first playthrough so it turns out that I eat better in your game than in real life, haha! One thing that could be interesting to work is how the weight affects your jump; maybe you could jump higher when you lose weight to access to even healthiest food or something.
Also, too many cookies? Careful or you won't get your teeth removed! ;)
That was amusing! Loved those funny random lines that kept changing with fun references, love it when interactive stories find ways to make the most of this not being a printed book! :)
I really liked this story! Can't wait to see how audio and illustrations feed into the atmosphere! I loved the change color on the text, very simple but effective idea -that took me back to The Neverending Story.
As suggestions I'd say that chopping the text into smaller screens would help pace and tension. Maybe not different screens but pacing the test somehow, to make the most of the interactive aspect of the narration and give the story an internal rythm so main emotions sink in (i hope I'm making any sense!). Also, some of the paths didn't seem to offer any additional info/emotion, particularly when running around the maze. It makes a difference when you added some "thought dialogue" from the main character.
Hope that's helpful! I really enjoyed your story! :)
I'm enjoying this game so much. It's so relaxing and peaceful. I love how simple yet beautiful it is and how you can make awesome pictures just with the light, the shapes, the colors and the few tools the camera has. And the monoliths!!!! <3
