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Hey, minor issue on p. 51 in the SRD; “The creation of black power is impossible"... I think the intended sentence is black pow[d]er.

I'm a bit skint for buying the full rules but I may try using the SRD as the mechanics behind a random one page dungeon game... If it works out, I may end up buying it with a bit of left over santy money if I have any.

I kind of envisioned it as something that'd be mandated for a scavenging mission amongst a band of mercenaries. Especially once the Captain was separated and people started dying. A live log would be a bit more trustworthy rather than just relying on testimony after the fact. These logs would essentially serve as her defence if anyone went back to the TAO ship and started asking questions about why two of her crewmates died from gunshot wounds matching her weapon.

That's also why she stopped recording the log after being fired on while attempting to go back to her ship-- she only adds the last passage two days later before sending out a distress signal.

It's something I thought a lot while writing to avoid potholes but I didn't directly mention in story due to word count.

Excellent stuff. I'm genuinely blown away.

You did a great twist on the theme and some very interesting character building... though I do wish we'd gotten a bit more perspective on what turned Quinel/Josef against his former mentor but I really loved their exchange ad it's just left me wanting more.

Edit: Accidentally double posted, sorry for that!

Great stuff-- it feels like a really original take on the theme with a fun little bit of High Elvish trickery at the end.

You did great with establishing the technology and using it to establish takes without getting bogged down in it.

This was the first story I read due to your early submission and I feel it really set the bar high for the rest of us!

I'm genuinely curious for more-- I'd love to imagine what a scene of negotiation between the Dark Elves and Plague would be like in your writing.

Solid story all the way through and the ending was quite a twist on what I expected. Good stuff.