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You know, now that I'm reading through it again, I think it was mostly stylistic choices! The one thing that did stand out to me was "Strong it may be, but surely anything will fall if he could out-think it." I would have added more actions from the character that would show his approach, rather than telling through exposition. That said, it was really just a minor item and generally I think this is a great story!

Excellent work! The world feels bigger than what we see here, which is impressive given the length. I have to echo other commenters here: I'd love to see more of this in future jams.

This was absolutely captivating. The only complaint I have here is that there isn't more (yet)!

I found myself enjoying this piece more and more as I read through. I especially liked how the last line calls back to an earlier moment. I agree with other comments about technical improvements, though they weren't a big issue for me. Overall well done!

I loved the back and forth here. There's a couple small technical items I would address, but those aside, this is overall a really enjoyable read!