hi - I really like how this game will leave you with two generated maps, and a mystery to solve in how then turned into now. (Maybe in play or maybe in fan fiction afterwards.) I like the treasure/tension questions too, I think that's where interesting things will emerge from. Maybe also where expansions could come in, you could have more romantic or horror-related questions.

I've read the comments below where you're talking about neutral versus setting-y thoughts, and it reminded me of Annalise, where the setting-neutral vampire rules is accompanied by sidebars showing two example games playing out. For that game it shows how the rules work in practice, like your example, but also that it fits in different genres. It would have messed up your word count to do that here, of course!

I'm glad the example was there; early on I was confused about whether the fragile paths are crossing the edge our group has reached, or going across the cell we're looking at. (It was the part about forks in fragile routes that started my muddle, I think; should I just be reading it that three fragile-path hexagons around a common corner could have paths into each other?)

Your example, though, doesn't give an example of the epilogues. I'd have liked to have seen that. 

I had a thought about 'advanced' questions while reading over - things you could only ask once the relevant scale was over 8, or something - that I've not managed to formulate into a sentence. Not much time before comments close though, so I might not. But something like Trophy, where once you're Ruined enough you can try to decrease your score on that scale. But then I'd be changing the balance between discovering and doing you've set up here. There's not really a question or a comment realised in this paragraph, I'm just gesturing at an area.

Thanks for making the game, I enjoyed reading it. 

I don’t have good English writing skills. I still hope to make myself understood in this comment.

I also leave below an Italian translation of the comment, for those who want to follow the discussion anyway.

Hi Esteban!

You’ve created a very interesting game. I really liked the idea of having the two different maps over time, especially the “character that explores in the past” rule (for 3+ players), as if in the present map the characters follow the footsteps of an ancestor.
Also great idea to include an in-depth example of the game to better explain what you mean. I solved some of the questions I wanted to ask by reading the example.

The only doubts I have are more about the usability of the maps.

• Why did you choose to give players a few references in the Discover the Past table? Was a different result for each number on the dice too detailed? Do you prefer to give players complete authority to draw what’s in each hexagon?
• I’m afraid there will be confusion on the two maps during the game. Can players draw a path on both the past and present maps? Or can players use two markers to mirror the drawings?
• From the example I guess you’ve tried the game.Did you find it easy to manage your movements and new discoveries? Or every time you move in the present you have to stop and roll dice?

Apart from these doubts that concern more the play than the game, I would say that you wrote a very good rules, clean and essential and easy to read.
Bravo!

Ciao Esteban!

Hai creato un gioco molto interessante. Mi è piaciuta molto l’idea dell’avere le due mappe diverse nel tempo, soprattutto la regola (per 3+ giocatori) del personaggio che esplora nel passato, come se nella mappa del presente i personaggi ricalcassero i passi di un antenato.
Ottima idea anche inserire un esempio approfondito di gioco per spiegare meglio cosa intendi. Alcune domande le ho risolte proprio leggendo l’esempio.

Gli unici dubbi che mi sono rimasti sono più sull’usabilità delle mappe.

• Come mai hai scelto di dare ai giocatori pochi riferimenti nella tabella del Discover the Past? Un risultato diverso per ogni numero era troppo in dettaglio? Preferisci lasciare ai giocatori l’autorità completa del disegnare ciò che c’è in ogni esagono?
• Ho paura che durante la partita ci si perda sulle due mappe. I giocatori possono tracciare un sentiero sia sulla mappa del passato che quella de presente? Oppure si possono usare due segnalini per rispecchiare i disegni?
• Dall’esempio immagino tu abbia provato il gioco. Ti è sembrato fluida la gestione degli spostamenti e delle nuove scoperte? Oppure ogni volta che ci si muove nel presente bisogna fermarsi e tirare dadi?

A parte questi dubbi che riguardano più il giocare che il gioco, direi che hai scritto un ottimo regolamento, pulito ed essenziale e facile alla lettura.
Bravo!

Hey, thanks for the submission. With the big caveat that I haven’t actually played the game, just read it, here’s my review.

Theme / Maps

I liked how you approached the theme by using past and present maps. This is one idea I thought about exploring, but decided it would be too hard to implement! I think you tackled it well. I like the idea of simultaneously discovering past and present as you play. There is very clear use of maps in the mechanics.

Tone and style

I thought this game was clear and well-written, but it felt a bit dry? I feel like you have a solid theme and could go a bit further with it in the text. I suppose if you want it to be setting/genre neutral that makes it harder. That said, I really liked the character archetypes and questions. I would call attention to that content a bit earlier - I was having trouble thinking what kind of scenes and narrative would work well until I saw those questions. Those are central! Maybe introduce the actual text for them earlier on? Just an idea.

Elegant

The amount of rolling/discovery feels high, but I can see it opens up options. The one thing I'm not sure about is the Treasure or Tension rolls. It seems like mixed outcomes don’t make sense mechanically even if they do fictionally. The example on page 6 feels like it should increase tension because Carl isn’t happy, but it doesn’t. I feel like that limits the narrative. This is somewhat dealt with by the players by including it in the follow-up tension results, but still. That didn't feel quite right to me.

I also agree with @Saddy4 that some rules around scene-setting could help with that issue.

Easy to understand

I thought the game was pretty clear. 

Overall, I liked it! I would like to play it. Thanks for sharing.

The game is well designed and has a lot of potentials:
It has a very cools the usage of the maps, how they are generated randomly and how the generated territories give you the possibilities to choose risks and make preferred paths emerge, and it is very cool how the hexagon players are in interact with the Characters to create a story. 

Still I noticed is that the game strives in the land between a board game and a roleplaying, did you think about blending more strongly in the two parts by adding to the rules a clear rule to how and when framing scenes? :)