I like the bait aspect, drawing the characters to the situation. The adventure seems like it will build suspense nicely and escalate danger well, becoming seriously deadly... works well with the sci fi elements involved. The way the aliens are presented as trees with fruit seems like it could come across so peaceful, but I love that they are so deadly! Well done.
Good section layout; narrow text is readable even at fit-to-page. Nice. The map could use larger numbers; they're hard to read without zooming in. This is one of the few with NPCs listed; there's a lot of good detail in only a few words. I like the "countdown" that doesn't have a specific timer - just an increasing threat level for the players to deal with.
Thanks for the comments! Especially for the 'good detail in only a few words' because this was my main focus when writing about NPCs and rooms. CC-BY-SA is set at metadata but I will also update the file after the jam is finished.
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Very good adventure. The best part: The bodies hanging from their heads encapsulated by fruits.
I like the bait aspect, drawing the characters to the situation. The adventure seems like it will build suspense nicely and escalate danger well, becoming seriously deadly... works well with the sci fi elements involved. The way the aliens are presented as trees with fruit seems like it could come across so peaceful, but I love that they are so deadly! Well done.
I especially liked the unusual tree aliens; just earthlike enough to be easy to understand yet truly alien in a nice, creepy way.
Good section layout; narrow text is readable even at fit-to-page. Nice. The map could use larger numbers; they're hard to read without zooming in. This is one of the few with NPCs listed; there's a lot of good detail in only a few words. I like the "countdown" that doesn't have a specific timer - just an increasing threat level for the players to deal with.
There's no CC-BY-SA notice.Thanks for the comments! Especially for the 'good detail in only a few words' because this was my main focus when writing about NPCs and rooms. CC-BY-SA is set at metadata but I will also update the file after the jam is finished.