In terms of the technical aspects of the work, I think this piece would flow better if its paragraphs were tugged apart some. The actual story itself... well, I always appreciate when a writer takes the ideas and images that OPR has inherited from the legacy setting, and does something new and different with them. This, while well-executed, is almost point for point what happens when the Salamanders or the Space Wolves run up against the Inquisition in 40K. Keep working on the technical aspects, and I'd love to read a story from you that explores a unique angle, or captures some aspect of the Sirius sector!

I did enjoy the moment of vindication when the enforcers were blown to smithereens (the dialogue there could have been a little clearer though). I also loved that these Brothers, unlike many of their peers, have a conscience and perhaps even a disdain for their master?

Love the commitment to exploring the theme, and find myself intrigued by the conflict at the core of the story, but had to come back a few times to actually piece the prose together for myself.

This story does make me wonder about the Salamanders place in the 40k universe, considering their peers more indifferent attitude to the mere mortals they share it with. Why do they put up with that?