I am all for this, I hate to admit that I personally didn't see strong ties to the theme, but that didn't stop me enjoying this read.
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Now I could be wrong, but I believe in OPR lore the God-King and God-Queen are mortal enemies, thus they do not share an empire (the lore is a little vague so maybe they are two opposing political parties and not two separate kingdoms) I am no authority on this so don't sweat it, I really loved your piece regardless.
Thank you so much for all this feedback. I do have a habit of slipping into the wrong tense at times and that definitely backfired on me here. Additionally I have realized that I failed to inject my perspective on the story here, and that has spurred me to do some revision. I'd love to talk in detail about this but I'll leave it at that to save everyone reading a wall of text in the comments section.
Very well written, I liked the initial battle the most and I was in awe of the main character's ruthlessness. I did get lost in some of the dialogue though, there was one paragraph where I couldn't keep track of who was speaking. Personally I found the ending a tad jarring given the main character's almost blind hatred throughout most of the story, but that's only my opinion.