The writing could have used another read through, as I found there to be many repeating sentiments throughout the dialogue that padded out the experience more then necessary. There's only so many times I can read and see the words moon and blood before it gets repetitive. Likewise, there is dialogue that serves to just be a repeat on what was said just before, making it redundant. Both of these together end up creating a lot of telling, but not a lot of showing.

But hey, you made a visual novel with multiple branches. That's still something to be proud of, just need to edit the script some more.

The inconsistent art styles really broke immersion for me. There was a lot of reading and this is not a format where I can enjoy it like I would with a real book. I suggest a more abbreviated story to complement this visual novel approach. Adding more choices, even if it only gives the illusion of choice, would keep me more engaged. Logical puzzles would be a lot of fun. Even roleplaying and just including the possibility of strategy would be helpful. A positive ending can only be valued when its weighed against the challenges it took to get there.

Per my son, "My suggestion would be to add more choice boxes so you can choose what to do (you need to add more). Creativity, there are too many vampires in the jam. Presentation: the menu needs to be made more cool. The theme: do something different. Most of these games were about vampires, blood, and Shakespeare."

Even though I'm not into visual novels I liked your story. Nice writing, straight to the point. Good work.

A straightforward vampiric visual novel, with many endings from branching dialogue choices. I was actually surprised by how long some of the routes went and was particularly interested in how many moral dilemmas it offered in order to challenge the player. I do believe the mixed-media art styles took me a bit out of the game, as well as the very energetic almost futuristic music in the main gameplay area seemed off-vibe, but ultimately this was still a good job that some people will still enjoy.  If the creator decides to do a sequel/spin off like they mentioned, there is a bit of world-building and lore that could be interesting to play off of. I personally preferred the more ominous bad ending routes to the neutral and happier ones, as the moral complexities tended to shine best when something bad was occurring or having of already occurred (i.e. the long neutral and bad end with Elizabeth.) I did not particularly like the bite ending though, as the automatic death in it with no option to try to stop your character was a bit dark. Credit due where credit is due though, as the author is afraid to shy away from character death and villain arcs. 

It is also notable that while many of the games I've rated so far were done by teams, this one appears to have been done by a solo dev, so that's pretty cool! Keep up the good work, and have fun making games!