Nice entry! You requested some feedback on discord, so here's my thoughts:

Layout:

• Great vibes, retro feeling.
• Body font needs to be readable, it's too black when compared with the headings (font doesn't have hyphens).

Dungeon:

• Nice map, serviceable. 
• Room 6 should probably connect to 3 to finish the loop. In my opinion, backtracking just wastes table time (our most precious commodity).
• Too many rooms are just straight fights with vengeful spirits. What choices do players make in these instances? One room is okay, but variety is the spice of life. The game shines when players have to think and engage with the game.
• Room 8 could use context for what the ghost servants are doing.
• Like the custom monsters, they all have interesting abilities. Great work!

I love, the empasis on the visuals, and how much of the page seeps with atmosphere, I think the map has lacks versimilitude, witht the large unused spaces between the rooms, and i found some of the doors confusing.

Great vibe, and I love Karlk, especially the mounting pressure of that Vengeance feature. Great work.

This design feels like a trade paperback novel. nice.

I held off checking out your submission until after I sent mine in. Yesterday, I noticed you also chose Forthe for your adventure, and I nearly fell out of my chair when I saw we both picked the same city! The original story was a great read, and your adventure was just as fun. Well done Crawler!