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Thoroughly enjoyed it! 

Best line: 

He got a decal of a skull with wicked horns painted on his pauldrons.

Very nice! Loved the part about jumping off the banister onto the fat guy!

Twisty ending! 

Interesting piece! My favorite line is:

To her diamond-black almond eyes, the slow-moving brute was both equal parts laughable and nightmarish.

A good read. Was the first line meant to be bolded?"

Despite the havoc warriors best

Entertaining :)

Would have loved to see the work in "Justified" columns. Best line: 

Elizabeth, oh Elizabeth, I remember when you, your mother, and your little sister came to my world along with your refugees and the Order that you would soon be inducted into

Great suspense and details. Highly rated. My favorite line: 

He combed his hair out of his face, fingers trembling with either adrenalin or toxin, he wasn’t sure which.

Good atmosphere building. Some paragraphs could have been broken up. Good use of theme and stretches of time.

Short and sweet. Lacking some OPR content. Some theme was found.

Loved the Log > End intro,