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A jam submission

Sharp ReflectionsView project page

Submitted by parent for OPR Writing Jam #4
Submitted by Hobby Fuzion — 1 hour, 21 minutes before the deadline
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Results

CriteriaRankScore*Raw Score
Adherence to the Theme#243.3103.370
Flow & Clarity#312.7282.778
Overall#323.0673.123
Concept & Originality#333.1643.222

Ranked from 27 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.

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Comments

Submitted

Very fun story! Keep writing! I can't wait to see what you create for the next Writing Jam!

Submitted

Fun story! Keep writing! You seem to have a good instinct for storytelling, so focus on grammar and voice as much as possible. :) I hope to read more in the future!

Submitted

This seems like a good basis for the start of the story it has all the characters it needs and a location that is ripe for use. It just needs some juice to it now. Something for the reader to sink their teeth into. The theme is very much there, but currently the story is wanting for a bit more to flesh it out. 
I hope to see a future draft of how this develops in time!

Submitted

Good work! Keep it up!

Submitted

literal reflection, nice

I liked this story a lot, keep on writing

Submitted

Good use of dialogue, and you build a good sense of urgency through the story. Nice "horror" feel. A few more hints about the setting would be good, to know where/when the story is set, but the bits you dropped ("Circus de Galaxy") were tantalizing!

Submitted

This is some great work. I especially liked how you managed to balance the dialogue, action, and narration moment to moment, creating a vivid mental picture, just like a movie. Even great published authors forget to do this many times.

I look forward to reading more next time!

Submitted

Considering your age, I think this was very well executed. You show a lot of promise and I hope you'll keep working to realize it!

Submitted

Short and sweet. Lacking some OPR content. Some theme was found.