I like the idea but the execution could be better. This is a way too general description without useful information. Adding random tables and a party vibe can improve it easily and quickly. Please add an additional page after game jam :)
Originally my entry was going to be a two sided but then I double checked the Jam rules so ended up paring the game down by a whole lot ahahaha. I'm planning on relesing the original version after this jam is over so look forward to that. At least there'll be an opprtunity to compare and contrast the games, especially since the original works with 1d6 prompts (so there's a bit more to chew on there).
I do think there's a good concept here and I do appreciate the map, there's just not a lot of "adventure" presented. I think including some encounters or situations for the characters to interact with would go a long way. I'm all for imagination, but some starting points would go a long way to take some prep off the GM. Still, I see the potential for something more fleshed out and great here.
Fun fact, this was originally a two sided game but then I double checked the Jam rules which state games are supposed to be on one page sooo I did admittedly rushed parsing. I am planning on releasing the two sided version of the game after the Jam is over and it has more tangible rules there with 1d6 prompts and stuff. Still a light solo adventure, so one can compare and contrast the two games.
Well I have been thinking of releasing the two sided version after this Jam over so there will be a fun opprtunity to compare and contrats the two games then.
I think that the idea is very creative and different from usual dark sci-fi themes. The rooms are somehow empty and there is a lot of work a GM has to put in to play this. It would help to add at least some random tables for encounters, 1-3 items you can find in each of the rooms and so on
I'm glad you like the idea. I designed this game to be played solo, so there really isn't inteded to be GM tho the idea of making a game that has one is interesting to me. Perhaps sometime in the future. The empty feeling seems to be the side effect of me parsing this game down to one page when I double checked the Jam rules that said games should be one page. I really did kind of rushed it however so I don't blame anyone for thinking this game feels rather bare bones. I'm thinking of releasing the OG two sided version when this Jam ends and it has actual, if simple rules with dice and paper, I'll be interested what folks think of that then.
I like the approach of "this is a derelict because of partying" rather than alien attack or tragic disaster. It's a little thin on details, and the layout plan is a bit odd--the karaoke room and game room are the same size as the bathroom. There's no CC-BY-SA notice in this.
Small confession, I originally made this game as two sided (as in, one page that uses both sides), but then I reread the Jam rules that said games are supposed to be on one side of the page sooo the rather thin rules might be a side effect of that ahahaha. I'm likely going to publish the two sided version of the game that has some actual rules in it after this Jam is done. I see what you mean by the layout, it did not occur to me people might think it's a bit odd, tho in my mind I imagined all the rooms being bigger than they appear but that's just me.
As for the CC-BY-SA notice, I did write it down in italics with the 'NO COPYRIGHT VIOLATION INTENDED' notice, was I supposed to form a link there? I may have missed some stuff since this is my first real Jam.
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I like the idea but the execution could be better. This is a way too general description without useful information. Adding random tables and a party vibe can improve it easily and quickly. Please add an additional page after game jam :)
Originally my entry was going to be a two sided but then I double checked the Jam rules so ended up paring the game down by a whole lot ahahaha. I'm planning on relesing the original version after this jam is over so look forward to that. At least there'll be an opprtunity to compare and contrast the games, especially since the original works with 1d6 prompts (so there's a bit more to chew on there).
I do think there's a good concept here and I do appreciate the map, there's just not a lot of "adventure" presented. I think including some encounters or situations for the characters to interact with would go a long way. I'm all for imagination, but some starting points would go a long way to take some prep off the GM. Still, I see the potential for something more fleshed out and great here.
Fun fact, this was originally a two sided game but then I double checked the Jam rules which state games are supposed to be on one page sooo I did admittedly rushed parsing. I am planning on releasing the two sided version of the game after the Jam is over and it has more tangible rules there with 1d6 prompts and stuff. Still a light solo adventure, so one can compare and contrast the two games.
Thanks for the feedback!
Hey, that sounds awesome. I'd be glad to check out the page two! Ahhhh I had to cut a bunch of text from my own adventure to fit on a single page.
Hmm, yeah, I think I would have liked to see the other side of this even if it was against the rules...
Well I have been thinking of releasing the two sided version after this Jam over so there will be a fun opprtunity to compare and contrats the two games then.
I think that the idea is very creative and different from usual dark sci-fi themes. The rooms are somehow empty and there is a lot of work a GM has to put in to play this. It would help to add at least some random tables for encounters, 1-3 items you can find in each of the rooms and so on
Hi!
I'm glad you like the idea. I designed this game to be played solo, so there really isn't inteded to be GM tho the idea of making a game that has one is interesting to me. Perhaps sometime in the future. The empty feeling seems to be the side effect of me parsing this game down to one page when I double checked the Jam rules that said games should be one page. I really did kind of rushed it however so I don't blame anyone for thinking this game feels rather bare bones. I'm thinking of releasing the OG two sided version when this Jam ends and it has actual, if simple rules with dice and paper, I'll be interested what folks think of that then.
Thanks again for the feedback!
I think it's worth it because the premise is really great!
Aw thanks : D
I like the approach of "this is a derelict because of partying" rather than alien attack or tragic disaster. It's a little thin on details, and the layout plan is a bit odd--the karaoke room and game room are the same size as the bathroom.
There's no CC-BY-SA notice in this.
Hi,
Small confession, I originally made this game as two sided (as in, one page that uses both sides), but then I reread the Jam rules that said games are supposed to be on one side of the page sooo the rather thin rules might be a side effect of that ahahaha. I'm likely going to publish the two sided version of the game that has some actual rules in it after this Jam is done. I see what you mean by the layout, it did not occur to me people might think it's a bit odd, tho in my mind I imagined all the rooms being bigger than they appear but that's just me.
As for the CC-BY-SA notice, I did write it down in italics with the 'NO COPYRIGHT VIOLATION INTENDED' notice, was I supposed to form a link there? I may have missed some stuff since this is my first real Jam.
Anyway, thanks for the feedback!
I missed that the copyright notice was on the game page! (I forgot to check.) I think you're good.