Was that a soulsnatcher?

Nice I also wrote a Dwarf/Alien Hive story, glad I’m not the only one thinking that way

Super strong opening -- I love the first person perspective, and the cheeky voice. The non-stereotypical dwarf figure is wonderful, too. What a great protagonist! There were some places where you switch between past and present tense, and one sentence in 3rd person that I think was probably meant to be first person. The ending felt a little rushed, too, and I didn't quite connect with it like I'd hoped. But the concept was solid and I'd love to read some more about this plucky dwarf one day!

Overall I liked this one, concept was good and I liked this oddball dwarf. who is also the only dwarf with good taste in drinks. But there are a few grammatical errors here and there that really screw with the flow and I feel it could've represented the theme a bit better. But otherwise it was a nice read! I like fucking over corporations as much as any other gal and it was nice to see a story that also involved the emancipation of slave gladiators.

The one Dwarf that other Dwarfs should have paid more attention to, growing up... lol.

Cool idea, I love the corporate espionage theme and character motivation! I did get a bit confused as to what the protagonist hoped to achieve as they didn't have any means of recording the evidence they sought. As such, it is hard to see what (beyond navigation) they can provide their new ally as they are now covered in gore and stick out like a sore thumb.

I think this could be so epic if you could find the word count to tie up those loose ends! Would love some more.