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Robots Can't See Dead People(OPR Writing Jam 9)'s itch.io pageResults
Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
Adherence to Theme | #21 | 3.821 | 3.821 |
Concepts & Originality | #32 | 3.500 | 3.500 |
Overall | #32 | 3.369 | 3.369 |
Flow & Clarity | #46 | 2.786 | 2.786 |
Ranked from 28 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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I liked the concept and the characters were done well, the quippy dialogue made them a fun duo. I did get a bit confused as to who was speaking most of the times, a few dialogue tags would've helped a lot. That aside it was a great story with one of my favorite One Page factions the Duchies, well done!
Oh no! You named the theme in story through a character quote! lol
Great Goblin tale. +9,999 Pluck Points to Gargle for his mix of cunning, charisma, chutzpah and gall. I was partly expecting him to come up with a more permanent solution to the automata not being able to sense ghosts, but the drugged lunatic targeting plan was awesome!
I liked the battles description very much :)
This was fun. Thank you for participating. I had some trouble following what the goblin plans actually were, but with a little re-reading and it came to me.
This was a fun submission to read (and congratulations on subverting my expectations for your setting--I was expecting Robot Legions and got Duchies instead).
One more round of proofreading would have made this a top contender in my mind. You've got some sentence fragments that broke me out of the story, unfortunately. Still, I really enjoyed this submission and am looking forward to seeing you participate in future writing jams.