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Howdy Ken! I played through your game I like it so far! Just wanted to let you know that the 'but she didn't recognize him link' is broken! Not sure if there's something after it but I'm letting you know! Also I recommend doing more with the choices. I chose the last option in the node that featured the different reactions to the ghost. I went back, thinking there would be other options and put me on a different path, but it added more to the text. Other than that, keep up the good work!

Howdy Ken! I played through your game I like it so far! Just wanted to let you know that the 'but she didn't recognize him link' is broken! Not sure if there's something after it but I'm letting you know! Also I recommend doing more with the choices. I chose the last option in the node that featured the different reactions to the ghost. I went back, thinking there would be other options and put me on a different path, but it added more to the text. Other than that, keep up the good work!

I was not expecting this! And don't think that's a bad thing!

1. The story (so far) is pretty sad. You're stuck due to the pandemic and you can't enjoy the day like you usually would due to your Zoom Classes.

2. I like the art! It's simple but really defining. The music made the experience even better.

3. The choices were good so far since this is a short snippet of the game, there's not much I can say. When you add more to it tell us! 

4. i'm expecting something to appear out of our comp screen an drag us into Zoom and when that happens I'm expecting some a strange tune like something from the Earthbound/Mother series!

SUGGESTION: You may not be doing things like jump scares and other scary tactics but if you want us to feel scared or nervous select your game's OST carefully! The music helps sets the mood and if there are a bunch of high-pitched unsettling noises or even silence (use sparingly for it to make an impact) it will keep us nervous yet interested!

It may not be finished but I like where it's going! First thing's first, thanks for introducing us to a new interactive story text editor, it looks amazing!

For part of the plot I'm a bit confused. Does Regular Girl's family have Hypertrichosis AKA Werewolf syndrome? I might be misunderstanding something there but it sounds like it. Also, is RG a product of an affair? It sounds like that may be the main reason for her mother's hatred towards her? If the reason she hates her is within the story, sorry! I'm not familiar with your story!

Other than that I'm interested to see where this will go!

NICE JOB Jackie! I like how it developed into us crafting our own reality.  Choosing to believe if it was Moby Dick or not doesn't sound too interesting , but in our choices we can see our fear and the game's suspense intensify the longer we played! That, on top of the dialogue an the text effects, makes helps to bring the story all together!

I'm glad to see that you have allowed the "piss pants" option to lead to an escape! Knowing Lupin, this was very in character for him! I can't wait to see the paths we'll have to break out of the prison!

I can't wait to see how it'll end!

So far I love the dialogue and how we're doing a small amount of detective work in order to get some info on the evasive Gatsby! I hope we do get to meet him, whether it's at the party or we find him while we're leaving!

I'm back and better than ever! I like how you were able to give a good amount of info despite how short your passages were! It's nice to see how we're able to see relationships with other characters and even sense some tension between them! One thing I will say is that you should have brought more attention to the evil voice earlier on. When I first saw it I thought your colored the line after slamming your fingers on the keyboard or it was a choice I didn't unlock because of my choices, but it turned out to be the voice!

Just one question though, was the Lord naked when we arrived to his loft?!

Sorry, this was in another section so I'm moving it here. I wonder if it's worth having the opinion points in the end if they don't really affect the options (choices or situations) available to you.

I like the cyberpunk twist to Neverland and how we're able to interact with the world and the characters! It's nice to see them with an edgy flare to them!

DISCLAIMER: I'm not too interested in Alice and the Wonderland so something I may be confused about might be common knowledge.

I can't say much about the protagonist. I can tell you she's a Brit since she used the word "muddle" and it seems like she's adventurous since we don't see her crying about her current situation. If anything, we can have a glimpse into her head once in a while to see how she's dealing with all of this.

Also, I noticed is that her name went from Adelaide to Alice when people in this world were referring to her. Was that name change on purpose?

I believe the story is going to lea us to why she was brought to Wonderland. I bet there's a reason why she was brought there but it's up to her (AKA us) to figure that out!

Not going to lie the reveal for the Frankenstein killing the little brother feels off. When we first saw him speak (which was a big "oh shoot" moment),  he sounded mature. As he continues to speak and he reveals he strangled Will, it doesn't sound like him. Make sure you keep his tone consistent!

I didn't read the book so you can correct me on this. If we're not playing as Frankenstein, why do we play as someone who has the last name?

I feel like the choices were good but maybe you should consider going more into the creation process of Frankenstein. Yes, we worked with the foot and the fun is making im come to life but what about the building process. How did we get the heart, and, the brain, and the eyes?

I played this already but I'll send my thoughts your way!

1. The first person does work! The only think I'm wondering is how did he get to switch places with the painting. I never read the book! Also remind me, did he switch appearances with the painting (he's the same guy but looks different)?

2. I still want to see him interact with the painting more. Besides the little snippet of it we see,  how does he feel about leaving his "former self" behind on a wall?

3. Pacing's great!

It's a bit boring going through the party but I believe that's because we already know how this party is from the beginning thanks to pop culture's love for frats. I'd say add some sound here and remove anything that seems too redundant. I like the interactions we're having so far!

I don't believe the intro is rushed at all. If anything it sounds like there's a mystery afoot! It also feels like there might be a romantic route in here.

Oh and I must say, I don't know what format you're using to make it look like a book snippet but's it's working! Try making the font a bit bigger (12 or 14) if you can!