It's a good start, the formatting and layout could use a bit more work to really bring it up so it looks and feels "official". The map is really where more work needs to be invested however.
Its a practical character sheet. It's got an okay visual feel, and overall reads well. There's some minor stuff with how the columns and the different sections feel a bit shoehorned together, but it's very usable.
It's well structured, has a little bit for everyone, including a new class. I would separate the class out, and really make the adventure setting it's own thing, and then polish the class up. A really great start though.
I think this has good bones, but needs some refinement in a few areas. The text formatting is a bit inconsistent, and the font choice feels slightly off. It makes it harder to read.
This is more of an adventure prompt than a full adventure. It needs a few more of the "where and why" to really drive the adventure forward. The prompt to get started is good, but what if the adventurers don't want to chase after the alchemist? Having more things draw them into, or at least approach the main quest will certainly help varied groups get engaged.
The artwork and layout are very nice, though they don't line up with the core works. The class is -more- powerful than most standard shadow dark classes, though the 1d6 HP does balance this slightly. I'd recommend it for a pulpier game.
This is a very well crafted adventure, full of interesting devices and a really well laid out so that new DMs and experienced DMs can engage with the material in a meaningful way.
I think the overall adventure pack is very well presented. I like the layout consistency and the inclusion of the map. I would love to see a suggested flow/designers notes to help guide a new DM through the adventure. An experienced DM won't have any issues slipping right into it.
This has the bones of a good supplement, but it needs final formatting and bordering to make it stand out. The monsters provided are all decent looking.
I like both classes, the presentation is good. I feel that the lack of gear limitations on the Champion Class makes them too versatile, but overall both classes have a solid flavour and good implementation.
I did a review and pulled an old monster that was a bit more suggestive than I'd like for this pack. None of the adult only content has leaked in here. There is mild fantasy gore, and a singular butt. Nothing that would require an 18+ content flag, and as Itch doesn't have a scaling system, there's not much more I can do.
