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That's great. Which of the surrounding jungle monsters did they encounter?

One of the grading metrics is writing. None of them is for art. It's not an ethical question. It's a "I want to see the adventure you WRITE!" question. The art is kind of irrelevant to that end.  Sure art helps make the product look professional, but you don't need it. And to that end, AI images make the product look unprofessional. 

Knave 2e has plenty of spreads with no art. Ben's adventure The Waking of Willowby Hall is practically artless (just nix the portraits). Art is icing on the cake that is your adventure.  In contrast, you can't turn in an adventure with no writing .  It's absolutely required. 

To correct this misnomer, only one of the top 5 in the Shadowdark used AI image generation. The other 4 used public domain or hand-drawn images. 

I uploaded the print ready version instead of the digital one... so that's why. Go me. I probably should label them better. 

Thank you for the kind words and placing it in the same category as that great book. 

Weird you couldn't search the text, because it's not an image. It's all text. The only images are actual images or the Gristle & Vine logo.  I'll have to look into it, because it works for me on mine. Hrmm...

Flourish & Brushstrokes can be use on the same inkshot unless a GM chooses otherwise.  

Thank you for the kind words. 

I don't see if you mentioned the art was AI or not in the pamphlet.  Or who wrote, edited, laid out, etc. I hope I just missed it, because you should attribute yourself if you did it. 

The concept of a moon maiden and cult worshiping the dark side of the moon is a fun subversion of the traditional moon cult trope. There were points I felt the descriptions carried too far and could have used more incubation to distill them down. I like the direction this is heading and hope to see what more you do with it.

Some formatting changes would make this a lot more usable at the table. Using tables instead of bullet points will allow you to better differentiate and organize information so it's readable at a glance. I figure you used the bullet points for space purposes, but there were a few places where the language could be tightened up to create the space for you. Such as, you don't need to say, "this is a standard kitchen." A GM will presume that. You want to provide details the GM wouldn't assume, succinctly for ease of use at the table. "Signs of struggle. Knife missing. Stocked, but rotting food." From there, you can flavor boost it. 

I have to ask, is the ipsum text intentional or was that supposed to be something else?  It made me laugh when I saw it, but I wasn't sure if it was supposed to be interpreted or not.

There's no rules stating one way or the other, but it's probably best to let your rating peers rate it as is, since it's already been rated that way by many others. 

Thank you so much. That's high praise and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I thought having the Arcane Library archivist commenting would make it a bit easier for the GM to digest so it sounds like that was achieved. 

Thank you for the kind words. If you get the chance, let me know how the play through goes. 

Thank you. Feel free to steal it. 

Thank you for the kind words. I'm always looking for ways to allow a GM to run it and not feel it's monotonous. Saw MB did something similar and thought I'd run it out as well. I think it works, but we'll see what others report. 

Thank you. I appreciate the kind words. I definitely have been looking at Johan's work recently. Guess it bled through.

Thank you for the kind words. Please let me know how it goes. Especially with the classes. I was trying for something a little less conventional.

I want to see this glow up because this is great as is, but it got the brain firing on how to take it another level. 

100% agree with this. I struggled to make sense of it my first read through since I kept catching on the typos. The layout could also use some work since you seemed to use 2 columns later on. Just something to help break up the blocks of text so the eye can better read and flow with it. 

Much appreciated. I hope you get to run it. 

Thank you. Let me know how your experience is. My rough playtest group found it difficult to destroy the face of the largest statue. So would be intrigued on how your group addresses it.

Thank you. I figured my template was already set, might as well yes it. 

Product page is the way to go. Good job overall on this. 

It's difficult to rate the inspiration when I don't know what the covers are without looking them up. 

We've been discussing as people submit them throughout the day on the discord so you're not the only one. But everyone is waiting to see yours. SO stop procrastinating here and finish so we can be greedy goblins and see your project! 

It's been the response on Discord that Baron gave. I added the previous experience to it.

These have been addressed in the other threads. The covers are public domain. You can find links to collections with more information on them in those threads as well so if you are missing month year information, you can find it there. Everything should be contained within the 8 pages. 

It is up now.

In the previous game jam, the cover was part of your page limit, because the cover can be used to add additional content which would put you over the 8 page limit.  The text on the jam says 8 pages or less. Must include your inspiration statement, so legal should be presumed necessary there as well.  Keeping in mind that the adventure The Hideous Halls of Mugdublub in Cursed Scrolls 1 clocked in at 16 pages A5 (or 8 pages A4) and is a 33-room dungeon, you should be able to include a cover & legal in the 8 page limit. 

The rules specifically don't limit you to making an adventure. You can make rules, ancestries, classes, etc. so you can target whatever you want.

Baron specified A4 size. A 11x17 would exceed that size.

You can. Baron already addressed it on the discord. He cautions though that you'll lose space to margins doing that, but since an A5 is just half an A4.  You can rotate the A4 to horizontal to make an A5 spread.

This may be the best compromise. I haven't really thought about e-readers and how they handle it, just pdf readers. I should probably give that a ponder. 

But thanks for the encouragement. 11 days to try to meet that target of before months end.  

Absolutely love the fonts you use on your pages and in the game. Do you make them yourself or are they fonts that could be found elsewhere?

Ah. Try again then. Should be good. 

That's a brilliant idea. Done. 

Date has been set on YouTube. Looks like it's 7/29 at 6pm CST.

Actually, a lot of your suggestions I cut because of the page limit. I was really trying to keep it within the 8 page limit. Sort of failed in that it was 9 with the cover, c'est la vie. So I dropped the Moon Maiden resurrection in favor of the 4 characters per player rules from Shadowdark.  Then, I took out the things that I thought the GMs might handle differently themselves simply because it was a gauntlet adventure and is designed to lead into their world and I don't know what their world is. So if their mushrooms weren't colored to denote something, or they didn't have a Moon Maiden, I didn't want to go too in-depth on their world-building. I'll probably add those back in as I flesh it out more fully though and toss it onto the adventure that comes from it.  

The Japanese should say "kumo no su": spider web. (I say should because google translate rather than asking someone directly because I don't know anyone who speaks japanese.) It's the name of my main city once people exit the Underdark.

It's more insider baseball for me than anyone else, because I run my drow using a lot of Japanese historical/cultural references because the majority of matriarchal societies that currently exist are asian in some manner. So I took the strong patriarchal hierarchy Japan has (because it's a more common frame of reference) and applied the matriarchal anthropology of the various asian tribes (ostracizing of men in their societies, cruelties, etc.) over top of it. It's a decent corollary. Things such as the emperor is a religious being (drow priestesses & empress), dark history from the feudal period correlates with some of the drow' history, yokai and body horror are more alien conceptually for westerners than the traditional god ethos, because it doesn't make sense that Lolth would allow the knowledge of the existence of other gods. She barely acknowledges her own children. But yokai and oni make sense as spirits. Spirits can be tortured or be used to torture her people. And so on. Totally works in my head, so it's my shorthand for myself until I finish making a language or something. 

Thanks. This was good to see. Explains how the score dropped. 

Our Baron, Mon. de Ropp has only stated this weekend on YouTube that I've seen so far.  The 2 guest judges have not posted anything either so I imagine Mon. de Ropp will schedule it like he has done recently with videos and that's when we'll know.