A very cool adventure, beautiful to look at and a good read.

I'm always wanting constructive critique, so I also give it, so here are the few things that bugged me in an excellent adventure:

• Because it's images, I can't search for text, which is mostly an issue because the layout is very complex. I got halfway through and saw "So they ran into the seekers" and had to skim back to find that because I didn't immediately remember who they were. Not that it's easy to change that (I probably wouldn't), but that did give me trouble.
• The maps aren't on the same pages as the rooms they reference, and I think there's space for them to be, or at least for smaller replicas to be. The need for page-flipping to go between the most-complex level (Even Further Down) and its rooms bugged me.
• Also on the maps, very small thing, but the "S" for secret doors being in the same font+color as the numbers of the rooms made it so I had trouble picking out room-numbers at a glance.
• On the calligrapher, very flavorful class, just some minor notes:
  • It's not entirely clear to me if you can do both a flourish and a brushstroke on the same inkshot
  • I don't feel like the class is going to scale past the early levels very well, although that's true of almost every class not in the core-4.
  • You have a harmless entry for the last option for flourish and brushstroke. Because the players only get to select a few of these ever, I would make the harmless ones free for anyone, as they otherwise will just not get used.
• Regarding the origami master, a very cool idea again:
  • I'd love a note on how much space paper takes up, as you had for ink
  • I know sentient fold can go up with a talent roll, but I feel like anyone that doesn't get that is going to be very weak after the first few levels

Honestly, really loved it. I wouldn't spend the time writing all that out if I didn't think this was a good adventure that could be made better.

Anyways, maybe you find some of that helpful if you decide to revise this, maybe not. Either way, what you've got already is excellent.

Ah I see you went with the landscape layout, to quote a movie "clever girrrrrl". I really appricate the text scrawlled on the side. Reminded me the A Feild Guide To Hot Springs Island. Great art work tooo, I love the skull bird.

Hot damn! This is dripping with style and playability. I learned something from your submission, too: You used 8 pages to create 16 pages by publishing it landscape for A5 booklet size. Brilliant! The cover art is stellar, and I love the punky feel to it. Also, the edible plants are a really nice touch. I'd like to play this one. 👏👏👏⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

gotta say this is my favorite of the jam. The way this is written is enagaging and the comments all over the pages is a fun touch!

Your layout and design are gorgeous!

This is oozing with flavour! Amazing art, great ux - truly a work of art! The new classes look super fun, look forward to giving this a try.

Beautiful presentation, very Borg. Nice work!

Cool MBorg vibe, really like the d4 and d6 table.  Making those rolls increases the replay value.  Super clean work.

Jaw dropping beautiful work!

The blend of punk, fantasy, and and horror in the design vibe is everything.  Has a Zine vibe too.  Tons of content, insightful and useful tools to assist.  Look forward to giving it a go!

Thanks for the landscape design. love it. Very cool design style, too.