I think this is the start of something great.  Definitely gave me moments of ideas and inspiration, like the addition of sound effects, of if you had a little campfire GIF at the bottom and the whole thing was a ghost story.  Definitely add more player interaction.  Not every player interaction needs to lead to branch in story, but would just serve the purpose of engaging more.  Overall this is one of the more unique experiences of the gamejam, and that's always a good thing! Keep up the good work

Personally I'm not a fan of visual/text novels, and I wish it was a little bit more interactive. But objectively, the story was well-written and kept me engaged, and something I didn't expect to find in a game jam, it's something really unique.

Hi! I’ve played your game and it was pretty cool experience. The story is really well-written and with a little more polish (sound effects, fonts combinations) it can be even better. Maybe it would be great to give more choice options to the player if it doesn’t break the flow of the story. Anyways, the game is really nice and  that’s truly a unique entry. Well done!

I enjoyed playing this game. I liked the art (as in font) and concept very much. Well Done!

First of all i want to commend you on finishing this game, its a hard thing to do and well done.

Secondly, I'm sorry if i come across as harsh in my following critique. I only mean the best in listing things that could be improved.

1) It takes entirely too long for the player to make a choice. You're going to lose players if you don't engage them early. A good way to engage the player early would be to let them chose some basic customization options, say their name or their gender.

2) The first choice's options should feel different. You can have choices that are all effectively the same like that but it should not be the first choice. That combined with the long times between choices makes the player feel like they are reading a book instead of playing a game.

3) I personally couldn't really follow the story. Though this could be a problem with my reading comprehension. 

Like others have said its a unique entry :) Unexpected story and reading concept since I don't do it enough hah. I think some of the scenes where characters were interacting and the text kept shifting quick could have been slowed down a little.  As for the future I can see the benefit in Foley audio / voice acting to give the tale more impact / make it more dynamic :) Overall interesting concept and fun story. Good job!!

This is a unique entry to the jam. I enjoyed it as a beautifully written piece of art, unorthodox in its presentation in the way House of Leaves is, e.g.

The pace was fun, it was a nice use of different effects and fonts to make it more immersive

well done

I enjoyed the story, would be amazing with some background sounds or music but I enjoyed it nevertheless! Great job! -Mato

i enjoyed it but wished some music in the background or little sounds to make it more interactable ^^

I enjoyed the writing a lot! Very good athmosphere. I think this still defenitely counts as a videogame and i dont really see a reason why it should not. Its a work of art just like any other videogame. keep it up!