Concepts & Originality 4/5

The story premise is neat and interesting (a follow up from the last 2 jams I believe?). I like a story about different, even opposing, groups working together to survive and growing in respect as a result. I feel like the motivations of the human captain are a bit under-explored, but that is probably due in part to the short word limit.

Flow & Clarity 2/5

The story gets a bit difficult to follow in the switching between past tense and present tense, and the changes in perspective between characters. Some exposition is repeated (we hear about the Captain's condition from the messenger, the pack leader, then again from the Captain himself) which muddles the pacing as well. Another editing pass to tighten up the pacing and clean up the grammatical errors could do wonders.

Adherence to Theme 3/5

I appreciate that the resources in question are the "rival" crew/captains, and I think you've done fine with that theme. I just think there is some opportunity to lean into it more or do something a bit more "outside-the-box" with it.

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I enjoyed the interplay between the characters. I do struggle a bit with a captain making that kind of decision, but the space was limited to explore the transition in thinking. Overall, well done!

Really loved this one. Seeing the two factions work together as the discarded misfits was awesome. The end is a bit abrupt but you did great with the space you had. 

I liked it! If I could make a recommendation, I think your sentences can be a bit redundant at times.
EX: "The creature in front of him, which happened to be a rat-like humanoid as well, nods satisfied."
You could probably have just said "The other rat-like humanoid nodded, satisfied." and it would've been just as clear and saved you some words. That's just one example, its definitely a pattern in your writing, but it's not too detracting. It just eats up a lot of words in such a small format, and sometimes it can slightly throw off the flow of what is otherwise a cool story.

Likewise,I feel like you could've given the captains death a little more focus. Maybe set the scene of the Rat-Captain reviewing his troops at the funeral for the prior one.

Other than that, I very much enjoyed the story. I very much appreciate a story in the vein of Frankenstien, but with the created being better people than the creator! Keep up the writing!

It's certainly not what i expected, but it was a delight to read.

An interesting take, thanks for sharing!

RATS!