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Man, do I love rats!
Anyway, good entry overall, but please, use proper punctuation. At times there are several sentences fused together without a comma i sight, it makes reading way harder than it should be. But hey, I still loved your take on the Rats!
Concepts & Originality 5/5
This certainly seems like an original and wacky take on the faction.
Flow & Clarity 1/5
The story has a lot of formatting, spelling, punctuation, and grammatical errors that make it difficult to read. The narrative itself is also a bit hard to follow, with a lot of exposition that interrupts the action. There are some neat ideas here, it just needs some cleaning up to make them shine.
Adherence to Theme 3/5
The concept of using the planet's gravity as a weapon is creative and interesting. I just wish it played more of a role in the story than only as a pretense/background motive.
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There is a lot of character here that I really enjoyed. Though some of the accents, formatting choices, and typos got in the way of the immersion for me. The timeline is rough, I wish you had some time for some revisions.
I enjoyed the story, but it was a little hard to read. I think you were trying to go for an accent, which I caught on after a while. Could be really fun with a little cleanup!
Whilst I enjoyed the humor this was going for and genuinely enjoyed the idea of rat clan craziness, the typos, sentence structuring, and exposition made it hard for me to fully get into. Would love to see this after a few more edits!
I thought i'd done a good job of catching all the typos, but just after I finished proofreading for them I fixed several sentences to make them clearer and accidentally made some typos which didn't get noticed until now, I'm also wondering if the British spelling didn't get mistaken for typos. I think I see what you mean with the sentence structuring, I often forget people can't read my mind and trying to look at it like you would shows me areas where things can seem off. The exposition was rough for me since I was working with such a short story and had to work in the theme, I think I could've done better with more room to breathe. I'm glad to see my rat people and sense of humour worked though, looks like the ideas are there and just need some better support.
fun story with fun characters were a handful of typos you might want to go over