This almost seems to be commentary about people with schizophrenia, I don't know if it was intentional or not but it was quite fascinating!

I really enjoyed the atmosphere that the writing and imagery brought together. I think some point-&-click type of gameplay mechanics/puzzles would have greatly added to the experience of  this already great submission!

I love the narrative! Gives that whole "surreal, nothing is what it seems" horror. I like the sound design and the way the images changed gave me some jump scares. I personally would have liked for it to have been a visual novel. Other wise, great effort!

Really cool. I dig how your subtly playing with the narrative to hint at this other world being more than just a hallucination. Also the mechanic of hovering over the image to reveal the world was mighty fine. I think some stronger consideration for how the images are revealed would have been nice. Like drawing the player into accidental reveals and placing their cursor on specific parts of the image and leading from where they last clicked to another area of the page. Otherwise really cool. Also it could have been nice to consider breaking up the formula of reveals. lean more into the is it isnt it nature of everything.

Really great writing and art, loved the atmosphere that was made reminded me of darkest dungeon. I think the only thing i would work on is building up tension for the creepier parts as that would make things more scary. Great game.

Awesome and different experience, it found myself feeling very unsettled by the freaky drawings. Story was very intriguing and made me question what was actually going on a lot. I wish you could have included more options when choosing what to do and in what order. But what I played was enjoyable definitely worth a play

Honestly such an awesome experience! Love the story and the way you bring each picture to life with the narrative and sounds. The way you guide the player with the bold text is genius, and makes navigating through the story seamless :)

I know it was a game jam so time is limited but would be a really cool add on if there were branching narrative choices resulting in two or more different endings based on what you choose. 

Your story is thought-provoking and made going through the narrative an interesting experience. Your art was impressive for the time frame, and the sound effects added a nice level of immersion. The fact that you could hover over pictures was also a clever addition. What might be a good idea to think about is adding more player agency to the narrative, since if the player embodies the character more through agency then the narrative will have more impact. 

Overall, it was a really cool experience. Well done!

-Juliette Love, Four Old Men

What a fascinating little world you have got going here! I had to play it twice, since in my first run, I missed some of those juicy visuals effects. Lovely story you have got going on, and very clever usage of mouse movement and clicking! I really liked the small details, such as the adding of milk to the To-Do List, and the little hints of something off in the writing. 

My only critique is that when the audio lips for some of the scenes, it cuts off very abruptly, revealing quite bluntly that it is looped audio. The effect can be quite jarring.

That aside though, I thoroughly enjoyed the game, thank you for creating this wonderful experience :)

- Jodi, To Walk Alone

Was a really interesting experience, I really enjoyed the interactive story and the distorted visuals. Not going to lie, the story kind of confused me a few times but then general idea of the gameplay and clicking on the action words was really cool. Only improvements would be to add more interactive elements, making it a kind of guided texted adventure.  

Was a really interesting experience, I really enjoyed the interactive story and the distorted visuals. Not going to lie, the story kind of confused me a few times but then general idea of the gameplay and clicking on the action words was really cool. Only improvements would be to add more interactive elements, making it a kind of guided texted adventure.  

I loved how as you progress through the game the effects get more and more unsettling. The sound design, animation elements, art and the image hover elements was a really nice touch and added to the overall atmosphere :). The writing was conveyed well and was an engaging read, but I would have liked to have seen more options in choosing different links to give the player more options and choice as to where the story goes and ends up. Its always fun to see a cool Twine game :D

The storyline had me very intrigued and interested, I liked the eerie vibe of it and it had me wondering where the story was going to go - it was very well written! I thoroughly enjoyed the animations too - big ups to whoever did them it was aesthetically pleasing to look at! However, I do wish there were more interactive features for the users to play around with to make it even more enjoyable. But overall nice! 

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(Ivy from Affiliated)

Your writing is amazing! The eyeball and zombie theme was captivating and well done. I love that you used twine (I think?) to effectively tell this narrative of someone hallucinating.  Unfortunately the game did lack some additional player agency and intrigue, but the premise was effectively communicated and I think that you guys did an amazing job! (Michaela Bussey, Four Old Men)

I really enjoyed the premise of the game and the overarching eerie vibe the game gave off with the disturbing imagery was unique. I wish there was some more gameplay mechanics even if only a few mini puzzles like drag and drop aspects (like taking the milk to the cashier for example) just to involve me as a player a bit more :) Otherwise I love the twisted reality the main character experiences, really opens your eyes 

Jade from Catnip Smokehouse <3   

That was quite the experience :O. I feel like you have something reallly awesome...and with a bit more time who knows ^_^