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A jam submission

Lessons of TeaView project page

The Eternal Dynasty faces the Alien Hive on a distant colony, and must think creatively to triumph. OPR Writing Jam 5.
Submitted by Vulpzor — 15 hours, 36 minutes before the deadline
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Results

CriteriaRankScore*Raw Score
Overall#14.4354.435
Adherence to the Theme#14.6964.696
Flow & Clarity#44.2174.217
Concept & Originality#44.3914.391

Ranked from 23 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.

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Submitted

A lovely read!  Here are my thoughts:

Things I really enjoyed!

  • The foreshadowing worked extremely well here.
  • The necessity of ritual in the character, even in this setting, helps establish the sense of lore behind the Eternal Dynasty
  • The description of the worn, battle damaged suit at the start really helped sell my on the situation right from the get go.

Thoughts if you ever revise this:

  • A division of 4  sections made the story feel a bit choppy.  I think the second and third sections could have been fused into a single section.  Reducing some of the battle (full credit, I enjoyed reading it) could allow for more space to build characters and dialogue if desired.

Nit-picks

  • Creature was repeated a fair amount in the third-section.  Additional words such as "monstrosity", " behemoth", etc could add some variation.

This was really an amazingly themed and written story.  Thank you for writing it for this jam!

Submitted

a extremely great read! and with the eternal dynasty no less! and tea! an important part of every good plan, i say. also love the minis the story was baced around!  

Submitted

That was absolutely delightful! I won't spoil it for anyone else, because the moment when I realized the comparison you were drawing was the high point of my read, but you took a relatively simple concept of an unconventional weapon and tied it into the narrative's imagery in a very, very charming way. Excellent work - and the last line was pure gold.

Submitted

I like the overall narrative arc on this one. 

Submitted

This really had great foreshadowing.

Developer

Glad you enjoyed it.  It was written very hastily so I am glad that it was enjoyable to read.

Submitted(+1)

Nice foreshadowing of the solution, if a little on-the-nose comment a the end which might or might not be out of place had there been more word count to expand on the character's personality. 

Developer

Fitting into one thousand words was definitely a challenge.  I kept to a strict 1k and would have loved to further expand the characters a bit more.  Thanks for reading!

Submitted

Ooh, figures!

Developer

Those are indeed painted by my own hand - none too expertly I might add.  But the main character is 100% inspired by a mini that I've painted.  I initially didn't like the ONI sculpted but painting the model really caused it to grow on me.  I use that one with the long blade as my commander, definitely like the pose.

Submitted(+1)

The figure on the mood board adds to the narrative; I like it!

Developer

Thanks!  As mentioned in another comment, I've spent time painting up all of the forces that feature in the story.  Definitely served as inspiration!

Submitted(+1)

Very interesting and thematic!

Developer(+1)

Thanks for reading, appreciated!

Submitted(+1)

Creative!

Developer

Thanks for reading!