Really enjoyed this one, a little hard to read, but the imagery is still powerful and the moodboard nails the feel, i think

Like others, some past/present tense, otherwise a good read.

I like the scene where the main character gets "seen at" theough the rift. This reminds me a bit of Sauron's flaming eye on top of Barad-Dûr.

There were a few issues with jumping between past and present tense i think, but when that is worked out it's a nice read.

Loved the concept and flavor! However, it was difficult to follow what was happening in the story due to some grammar and wording issues. Looking forward to more of your work!

Woot! glad you could join us! Definitely a worthwhile read to be had. Good stuff!

Thank you for participating in the jam.
If I had a compliment it would be that conceptually this is a fascinating idea, undead possessed Wardens getting back up after a deal is struck
if I had a criticism it would be that I am not 1000% sure that is what happened. I think that is what happened but in honesty I am not sure.

Hope you keep writing thou. 

so glad you were able to work with the OPR team to get this published, thanks for sharing!