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Haha!  Don't know how I didn't see that influence.  Glad you enjoyed!  Thank you 

Thank you for the kind words.  Means so much that you took the time.  It's our most valuable asset.  I appreciate you!

You probably know this, but going back through and seeing your initial idea to now...it is crazy!  The core is there, but the process really helps if you can get revisions in...which leads to your discovery (thank you BTW.  Can change that for an update after).  When I made the last revision and relinked all the images, I linked it to a version of the table I shared with a friend for the phone.  The files size was the giveaway lol.  

Loved watching this develop on the server.  Great art and layout.  Fun story, and easy to adapt to a campaign or a one-shot.

Superb layout of tables and flow of delivery.  Art choice is 🤌  love the thought that went into this, and I'm jealous of the back cover (less is more).  This feels like a moose skin notepad that you could pull out and run anywhere.  Well done

I had to look up that title.  It came out right when I enlisted...explains it a little.  I almost spit out my drink in the teaser trailer for part 2...the girl sleeping and the counting sheep that are really bombs!  Glad you enjoyed it, and now I have a game to check out with my son.   Cheers 

This is true!  Dang...I needed this argument on a few graphic design jobs...completely forgot about that.  Thanks @Baiyo42

Absolutely!  Happy to offer options.  Graphic Designer, and use to run print shop for the Midwest VAs, so I understand accessibility to color printers isn't always there...and eyes don't always like or sometime can't do color.  Cheers

Really a beautifully designed adventure.  I could leave this out on the table and would function as a good read or just decore...THAT is hard to pull off.  Great tension in story, easy to read through and could see this as an important site in a campaign story or one-shot.  Well done!

Nice and clean layout.  Really enjoyed the maps.  The color scheme matches well with the whole vibe and map colorization.  I have heard of tandem quests but never been a part.  This has peaked my interest.  Great work!

Thank you.  Truly appreciate the time you took to review it, and that you enjoyed the experience.  Cheers

Thank you.  Happy I have some fellow 80s peeps in here to really get the little things.  I appreciate you 

Can't wait to see what you release

This really means a lot.  Imposter syndrome was real on this one because I put so much of my last 5 years into it.  I didn't think my brain would translate.  Cheers for the kind words

Need to phone my English major friend for editing lol

This means a lot.  There was definitely a lot of me in this.  A lot of the seeds from this adventure started in a VtM discord chat, and helping each other in Body Doubling session.  So happy that it touched you and you felt the message a bit in it.  Spelling is definitely a struggle since Cancer 4 years ago (fog brain) plus I cut down text to fit limits so sometimes it made since to me but then I read through and I'm like...oof.  will definitely give another run through and add some art and stuff I edited out. Cheers for your time and your feedback!

Layout definitely helps refine...originally started as an 8 page myself.  Kudos to making it work.

I think you might of found a niche for kid-friendly games, or games for grown kids who like whimsy and fun.  The adventure creation table is wonderful, and I feel like this could be a seed for a whole campaign for kids...and an awesome learning tool.  TTRPGs are making their way into schools, therapy, and such.

My suggestion would be a rewrite of the names and descriptions a bit (could run into copyright issues if it got big enough), but the homage to it and meat of it could stay the same.  I enjoyed the core concept and delivery!

For not being a native language, this really is an amazing adventure.  I don't feel that, just a fun ride.  There are some layout things (mostly mentioned already) but I love that you can feel the GM energy in this as spark for it's creation!  Art is very nice, and creativity for the GM to design that is fun to tweak with the magic items.

I dig grim adventures placed at critical times for a group...this feels great for a campaign arc.

Has all the markings of replayability and memorable moments for a group.  Floating Mirror is my favorite!  Cheers on the art!

Betrayal system is such a nice touch, especially the delivery.  Fan of the influences this pulls from.  Would love to play this one.

Really enjoyed following along in your process for this.  The effort and dedication show.  Fan of the art (appreciate the hand drawn beforehand that some might not know went into it beforehand).  Vibe made me reminisce about my childhood on Saturday mornings.

Love the art style.  Well done on the layout.

Love a good all Black & White module when done right...this is done superbly!  The art pulls you in, down to the page numbering.  The layout is crisp and jam packed without feeling like it...a Faberge Egg of an adventure.  Well done!

The map alone had me.  The layout is clean and laid out with precision.  Love all the resources and detailed information that is delivered without feeling like an info dump.  Great work

All that cheese...now I want cheese.  Love the soft colors and story.

Truly terrifying creature...and yes, knowing now what it is...this triggered my fear from childhood of the 'Children Under the Stairs.'  Memorable is a great way to bring people back for another round.  I echo what has been mentioned about readability, but an easy fix overall and might not effect some.  Great job, and wonderful concept as a whole.

Love the idea of naming the monsters by the players...this can take on a life of it's own, and seeds future adventures if this is or becomes a part of a campaign.

Layout feels very DnD-esq which could help bridge with that being so popular.  random tables is nice and love the size/location of the map.  Nice work!

Amazing writing!

Definitely intriguing premise.  Art is very nice and unique.  Could totally see this as an animated series!  Can't wait to try this one.

Art is very engaging.  The NPC descriptions give the table a lot to go with.  Cheers 

Vibe checks out!  This is a fun one.  Clean, easy to understand and run...easily put into any game system.  The art and color scheme are special on this one.  We'll done!

Love the vibe, the art choices, and color scheme lends to the whole thing.  The paper doll in the back takes me back to my childhood with the push pins through the holes and moveable art.  Great overall presentation.  Look forward to running this one as a player or GM.  Cheers!

Very psychological in vibe...I dig that.  Like the references to other psychological stories.  There is a lot going on, so the note-taking player in me is giddy.  

Clean layout...only suggestion would be to see what a 16 page format might do for breaking up some of the text (post 6-8 in particular), give a but more gutter space perhaps.  However this isn't much of an issue just more of a curiosity.

Love the rich NPC characters. And find myself wanting to know more of their backstories...opens up prequel modules as a possibility.  Cheers

I truly appreciate the kind words.  You articulated exactly what I was going for here.  I truly wanted to respect the spirit of OSR, but present something new and fresh...the idea just resonated with me too much not too, so I took a risk.  High honors for me if it sits with just one person in comparison to some of their favorite community content.

You didn’t miss it...I was just playing off what you said in your post, because I 100 percent agree...was just saying it could be something to add in a later version.  Definitely get rest though

Before the initial version, I cut out a part where you can use the example or make your own room NPCs with 6 things laying around you.  Then make them into the NpCs that represent your Mind Gremlins, inability to sleep when trying, distractions, hyper-focus, info-dumping, and addiction.  You very well could be trapped...might suggest some Floortime, some good trusted friends, and a soundtrack for vibe.

A bonus magic item is a barrel that burns Morpheus' folders on plot and prep...does Pyschic damage no matter where they are.

Idea started after a session in Vampire the Masquerade.  Our server has cool downs after, and one player was doing Floortime after but her cat kept zooming and wanting "biscuits."  I ' been researching TTRPG as a therapy tool, and boom...thought spiral.  I was listening to Tron Legacy's soundtrack when it happened...

I appreciate the feedback and knowing a fellow 80s fan.  Cheers!

Like the font choice.  The art ties well with the story and vibe.  Great use of tables.