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~ El Escritor (The Writer) ~

A romance love story, with a little bit of drama, suspense and humor. · By Seth Baine

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A topic by Seth Baine created Jun 09, 2021 Views: 1,867 Replies: 58
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Do you have any appreciation? Any suggestion? Did you like it? Or maybe you didn't? Tell me here! No hate, please nwn

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Wow, just wow.  So powerful these last few chapters are.  The special moment camping brought tears to my eyes.  Would you be able to post the translation to the song?  I picked a few phrases here and there and managed to get the gist of it.  However it was still beautiful.  That cliff hanger though.  Ugh.  You know the story is captivating when you shout out loud "NO" when the end of the content shows up.  *sigh* I'll wait impatiently for the next release!  Well done.

Developer

Aw thank you so much! I'm so glad someone actually liked it and enjoyed it!! hehe nwn. The song is called "All i want", made by Kodaline. I just made my own version, translated it and adapted it to Spanish. And about the cliff hanger... well... i can't say much more than "expect some turbulence" :s 

Ahhh! That's why that sounded so familiar!  Thank you for the reference!  Well done.  Seriously, think I played the song like 4 times before Iet it move on.  Tears each time.  I honestly relate to this story you're telling too well.  Almost everything is an autobiography so far.  Different locations and names obviously but everything else is almost the same.  Its uncanny.  Thank you for sharing.

I don't know if you realize, but every time I see this I have to chuckle.  To me it looks like a certain character is wearing a fedora hat.  Now that I've pointed it out you can not unsee it!  hehe


Developer

Lol, yeah, looks like a fedora hat! It's supposed to be scary though... XD

I mean... if I saw that in real life... that character wearing one I'd swoon and then be afraid.  They really do rule the world.  But yeah that is why I chuckle when that scene happens.  First time I saw it I was so confused hah.

Threesome with the brother?

Developer

Oh my God XD, you just made my day. Still, please no spoilers! LOL

Is there an option to modify protagonist's name and place  another? It would make it more inmersive. 

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Like it has been posted on the main page, it won't be possible to change MC's name due to the way this VN was written. Things like "Lucaaaaas", or "LUCAS" made it hard (The code has to be specific for each personalized word, if you know coding maybe you'll understand). I'm sorry if this reduces the immersion. I still hope you can enjoy the VN :)

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Well, I don't know all codings I think in all of them you can set a variable value as capital. In case of the long string, in Java, for instance you can find in the string vowels with charAt () and multiply it as needed.

I give you a clue in this horrible language: String - 16: Reverse Vowels order in Given String - Bing video. You go all over the string and once you find the last vowel, you just have to capture it.

I'm not saying that you have to use it, this writting is YOUR work. But if you need it in another work, here you are.

Developer

Thank you for the advice! I'm sure I can use it in other projects nwn

Me ha gustado la historia aunque hay algo que últimamente encuentro en algunas de estas novelas que he tenido la suerte de disfrutar y es que los protagonistas suelen ser bastante mojigatos. Entiendo que tampoco es cuestión de crear personajes que sean obsesos sexuales, pero hay cosas que no entiendo, como ¿porqué a una persona le incomoda que entre en una ducha otra persona con la que ya ha tenido sexo? Si hay una relación de intimidad, ¿porque hay que pedir permiso a la otra persona para abrazarla de vez en cuando?

En cuanto un hombre tiene alguna pulsión sexual hacia el protagonista, muchas de estas novelas no dudan en ponerle esa etiqueta de obseso. Un hombre con el que se ha tenido sexo y desde luego, se le ha visto desnudo, no debería provocar que "sangre la nariz".  Nunca he entendido eso del sangrado de la nariz, creo que es de influencia japonesa.

Todo este tipo de situaciones me provocan cierta sensación de represión sexual.

Por otro lado, la historia está bien y es imposible no enamorarse de ciertos personajes (platónicamente hablando).

Developer

Gracias por tu apreciación! En realidad todo lo que leíste (Muchas gracias por darle una oportunidad a esta historia) es bajo mi percepción del mundo y mis experiencias vividas. Como dicen por ahí, todos ponemos un poquito de nuestra alma en todo lo que hacemos. Supongo que esto es especialmente cierto en esta clase de proyectos. Comprendo que ciertas acciones/temas puedan verse de esa forma, represión, timidez, cosas por el estilo, pero eso es lo bonito de leer historias ¿no? ¿Ver como otras personas ven el mundo y compararlo con como lo veríamos nosotros? :3 

Otra vez muchas gracias por leer esta historia. Me alegro que te hayas "enamorado" de esos personajes! nwn

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I have a lot to say! I will probably repeat a lot of the following in my review...

This is easily the BEST visual novel I have ever played on this site! Oh my goodness, what a beautiful story!

I am not ashamed to share this game made me ugly cry HARD in the past week. I probably cried 5-6 times, the first being at the beach, during that talk with our neighbor (I'm trying to avoid spoiling things, hehehe). Your ability to convey raw and complex emotions through writing is superb! Then I read this was originally conceived as a novel, and it made sense how well structured and paced the story has been so far! And George won my heart within the first 2 chapters, and remains there, embracing me. I only lament he isn't a real person in our world, I would literally walk a hundred miles to meet someone like the cuddly big guy, or "Grandote" (and shame that we never see him naked, not even a peek in flaccid state, but oh well, I love him regardless)!

The supporting characters were loveable too! Specially Donnald! Early in the game, during one of our doom premonitions, I got the impression the sweet little old man knew more than he let on. By the time we reached the climax of Act 2, it was without a doubt clear to me he knew something! The antagonist in our dreams is terrifying, specially in that intense campfire nightmare... goodness, that alone earned the 18+ rating. The antagonists in the waking world are equally effective and nefarious. I keep rooting for George to save the day.

Lucas got on my nerves a lot because I felt trapped within him! This is a positive, of course, shows how engaging the narrative is. I became one with Lucas and I felt impatient and powerless, watching him struggle with his insecurities, his mistakes, and at times I found myself vocalizing expletives at the screen, imploring for Lucas to find his courage and take a leap of faith. I was eager to tell George how much I loved him FOUR times, long before the protagonist! But alas, Lucas kept thwarting my hopes... Robert got the short end of my disdain, initially, then I felt bad for him... Thank goodness, I am bilingual! I got to play beyond Day of Winter in Spanish, and WOW! People playing the game in English are in for an intense roller coaster of emotions! You will cry, you will laugh, your heart will melt, you will feel warm in your stomach, you will feel hopeful!

My star rating will be in the page review...

Developer

Wow... I can only say thank you... Thank you for giving this story a try. Thank you for your kind words... And thank you for sharing your experience with me. You just made my heart warm and happy, very happy that someone really enjoyed this "roller coaster" with me hehehe... I's so glad you could experience those emotions just like I did when writing. And sorry for the crying part... yeah, we share that too hahaha.

Keep waiting for the next updates! every new build comes with little changes to the story (new CGs, some phrases changed), so, even when the main story is intact, some small things (very small things) could change. That, and the veeeeery slow process of replacing the music with ones made by my own hahaha.

THANK YOU AGAIN!

I will definitely continue checking for updates!

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Hi Seth, I stopped playing 10 days ago because I have been stuck in the same point of the game. I want to avoid giving any spoilers, but it's on Chapter 17, after Lucas finishes giving us updates on the events of the past couple of weeks leading into spring time. After the <CRACK> and subsequent terrifying events. No matter which of the two paths I choose, the bad outcome is the same, and thus I am trapped in a never-ending loop.

Developer

Would you mind contacting me via Instagram so you can describe the problem? It's on my profile!

I don't have an Instagram account, though. :(

Developer

Send an email then! That way you can add all the details spoilers included ;D

Waaah TwT why'd chapter 12elve have to end like that :'( damn man, this VN is really great! ^^_ it's immursive, and xou reeaally get drawn into the story. And while I know a few things are lost in translation, xou still get all of 'em feelings across brilliantly~ UwU

I kept noticing Morenatsu undertones thought the gameplay. Similarities that just stuck out too much to not be similar :3 So when that piano scene came in, it was like: "oh yeah! Morenatsu fan right here! xD".

And hey, xou said xou wanted to start this out as a book? And the thing is, I started my book out as a VN, but am in the process of turning it into a book :p

But I must really congratulate xou on this work. It's brilliant, and deserves all the love it can get~ I'm really looking forward to the rest of the translated chapters! >_</ keep up the good work!!!

Developer

Awwww, thank you Phamyne! Don't worry, next build with chapters 13 & 14 will be uploaded soon, like... in three or four days.

Yeah, Morenatsu was my first visual novel, and I fell in love right away with it. I'm really trying hard with translaltion, and like I wrote on the main page, I'm not a native english speaker, so yeah, I'll get lost in some parts of the translation. That's why I'm in need of testers! hahaha. Thank you for your encouragement, it really gives me the inspiration I need to keep working hehe.

Have a nice day/night! nwn

Don't worry man, xou're doing a great job all 'round! ;) Just focus on getting everything all translated, and 1nce it's done, xou can get some1ne to assist xou ^^_ the problem with translating can be a  difficult 1ne :/ coz like, maybe xou want to word something in a particular way, but then, people are like "well... that's not common in English, but it can still work". So yeah. Maybe some1ne who speaks Spanish would be a good match for helping xou? I find xour writing style very poetic at times~ Either way it's really good ^^_ I seriously couldn't stop smiling throughout the entire story so far :p

Heh, good ol' Morenatsu ^^_ it's the godfather of all VN's. The "childhood crush" for most of us ^///^ glad to see people are still drawing inspiration from it.

Xou too man, great day/night and keep up the great work \>o< best of luck!

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Just finished Ch 15 & 16 and would like to comment on the sex scene UwU as a smut writer, I had no idea what to expect. But I found much appreciation in how xou handled it :) and while xou didn't make it raunchy, explicit, or dirty (which is usually how I like it >.>), it totally works! ^^o most writers skim over these things because it's too hard or they feel stupid writing sex scenes, or worse yet, they decide to write it and do a piss poor job! >_< But xou really *nailed* it~ ;) I like how xou don't go into too much detail, but still get across how important, emotional (and hot), the moment is. And xou accomplished this while still keeping the scene in line with how xou've written the rest of the story. Innocent and passionate, but just sexy enough to make us drool~ :p so kudos! My only concern is that I'd like to see this scene extended. I really enjoyed how xou focused more on the emotion side of things, as opposed to "how hot George's dick felt inside of Lucas with each powerful thrust". So I was a little sad to see it end too soon! QwQ no premature shaming here, but please gives us more! ^__^/

Developer

Hehe, thank you Phamyne, of course it will be more. I just wanted to "respect" their privacy hahaha. Yeah, I prefer to see the beautifull of it, not the... mundane stuff. Thank you again Phamyne, keep expecting the next updates! And if you want, feel free to contact me! :3

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Hi razorbee! Thank you for reading! And yes, you assume right. If I read correctly, 99% of those points you wrote are answered in the next chapters. You just have to be patient, I wouldn't be a good writer if I answer all the questions at once hehehe. And wether I make up to your expectations or not, that remains to be seen hehehe. I hope I do, but if I don't, i just hope at least I brought a smile :).

Thank you for your feedback!

Have a nice day/night! nwn

Oh, and I forgot to say something: part of the information given and it's logical sense are always depending of the desicions you made. Certain decisions brings light to the points you wrote, leading to important conversation and such. Good thing is, wether you choose the "right" desicions or not, you can check later whenever you finish the VN, since this activate the guide. The VN has 3 endings, and the understanding of them depends merely on the choices you made. But my canon ending (which not necessarily it's everyone's canon), I wrote it trying to explain the most i could without being forced. So, like I said, I hope it doesn't leave a sour taste. But! If you get the bad ending, of course there will be things that you won't understand hahaha. That's why is a bad ending, right?

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Hehehe, I will only say one thing. "The Writer" thing... Expect a surprise with the literal last words of the VN :3

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wow love your vn Seth when will the actual nsfw 18+ content be added in your vn and love the story of your game will there be more hot romanceable characters in the future updates of the game?

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Hi Baralover! Thanks for reading! Let me copy paste the info that appears in the main page.    "~This game may contain pictures of explicit GORE, so please, read discreetly. You will find depictions of homosexual relationships, sensitive topics, and pictures that may be considered NSFW (nothing really explicit, but better play safe, that’s why the +18). --- IMPORTANT: This visual novel has only one love-interest, meaning that there's not other routes where other romances can be pursued. However, your decisions WILL affect your ending. Actually, this story was going to be a book, but I decided to go this way because of the way that music and sound efects improves your reading experience". 

So, to answer your question, there won't be any other romance routes as it's explained in the main page. This is because this story was going to be a book, but I decided it to make it VN. And about the +18 content, again, like its written in the main page, there will be nothing really explicit, but I better play safe since I wouldn't like to be banned by uploading content that *may be* considered +18. That's it! 

Thank you Baralover! Have a nice day/night! nwn

ah ok will patiently wait for the next update of your beaUtiful game

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I noticed no "name your own price" tag when downloading. This novel is just so good, I feel bad for reading it for free. So maybe consider accepting donations.

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It's no necessary, I mean it. I want people to smile while reading this, and the more people read, the more smiles I get! Not everyone can buy hehehe nwn. Besides, I do this because I love what I do, and I'll keep doing it wether I get  profit from this or not hehehe. If you really want to help me, share it! I'd be VERY grateful.  nwn

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Hi again Razorbee!

Hehehe, thanks. Yes, writing the story took me a year, make the VN another year, and translating is taking me another year too hahaha. But I enjoy it, a lot. About the last name, yes. Similar, but not related. Coincidences happens all the time in real life after all. And I loved your list hehehe, glad to see those moment weren't overlooked. And keep expecting the next updates! More content awaits to be discovered hehehe.

Have an nice day/night nwn

PS: My favorite is also The Iron Bull hehehe <3

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Dude :l duude :o DUUUDE! xO jeeze, this VN! "^^_ Haha, it's really the best~! :D I just finished reading through the last 4our chapters and, oh gosh, xou really throw us through emotions, ne? :P 1ne minute I'm laughing, the next I'm crying, and eventually I'm blushing as my heart swells UwU I've said it before and I'll say it again, xou're a reeeaaallly good writer! >_</ thank xou sooo much for sharing this amazing story with us! And as much as I don't want the story to finish, I'm so excited to see how it ends! n_n

1ne thing I want to suggest though, I'd really like xou to use xour sprites more. I understand the tale is meant to be seen through Lucas's eyes, so I get it when xou don't show the sprites when characters are walking and such, but when they are sitting down, or even when Lucas is in bed with George, I really think xou should display sprites. Xou've put so much work into them that I think they deserve to be shown as much as possible~ Also, I believe seeing thier emotions will really help solidify some of those heartwarming moments~

Keep up the amazing work! <3

Developer

Thank you so much Phamyne, for all your kind words. Yeah, kind of makes me sad to know that we're close to the final chapters, but yeah, it has been a good ride. Even if it is now well known as other VNs, I consider myself happy, because all of you got to read my story. Most of the things you've been reading actually happened to me, so the fact that you can emphatize so much with Lucas means you can empathize with me. And that makes me happy.

Regarding the sprites, yeah, I also wanted to include more "visuals" when each character speaks, but I think not including them was a way to bring you more story related stuff. Like I've stated in some devlogs, I am the only one working on this, and work/the house project/other personal projects and the VN... I think I'm really good at organizing my time hahaha. But yeah, I also wanted to bring more "visuals", but my "programmer sanity" told me to focus on writing and translating hahaha. 

That's it. Thank you again Phamyne for your constant support. It really warms my heart.

Have a very nice day/night nwn.

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I can't stop smiling like a big ol' idiot! ^///^ I both HATED and LOVED xou for how xou ended the 21st chapter O.O because like, how could xou end the chapter like that!? But at the same time, that's how xou're supposed to end a chapter! x'D I'm sooo satisfied with how it all concludes~ UwU I feel far too good to even consider giving the other path a go :3 wow, dude, just... Wow. What a journey! I can't wait till xou've coloured all the CG's so that I can read this from the beginning! ~El Escritor~ has filled a part of my heart like all good tales are meant to u_u I cannot thank xou enough for sharing this amazing story with us! \^__^/ 5ive stars all the way~!

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Awwwww, thank you so much Phamyne nwn. Yeah, I can't give much details here in the comments sections because of spoilers hahaha, but yeah, that scene was SO HARD to write. Not because I didn't know how, but because I did know every detail of it. Thank you again for reading this Phamyne and your constant support in the comments section. 

Have a nice day/night! :D

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I know right?! Chapter 21 wrecked me as well, hehehe. My first time playing, I was upset because I thought I had gotten the bad ending, and the ending made me sob so loudly my neighbor knocked on my door to do a wellness check.  XD

But thankfully I got the best ending, and the ups and downs made the ride definitely worth every tear shed. Such a beautiful story, even six months later, it continues to live rent free in the rooftop of my heart and mind. :3

P.S. You are adorable, Phamyne!

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heehee! ^__^ lol, shame! But I feel xou! :p ~El Escritor~ brought tears to my eyes throughout the many chapters too UwU and I ALSO thought I got the bad end "^^,  I considered doubling back to make other choices xD

I couldn't agree more :3 this VN will stay in my heart alongside Adastra, Echo, and all the other good stories :) the build up was perfectly paced and led beautifully to such a completely satisfying ending n_n

El Escritor is the best VN I've played on itch to date. And the ending is perfect proof of why. Also the emotional beats and execution, and lovable characters one wishes existed in our world!

This was such a fantastic read. Also I'm very happy that I got the perfect ending first try lol.

Thank you Seth Baine for this experience!

Developer

Awwww, thank you for reading Deroat. And congrats for reeaching the perfect ending! Well done!

Congratulations on finishing the VN! It's a really great story, one of my favorites, and George is very well written and easy to love. And congrats on writing one of the few (4) VNs that have been able to make me shed tears.

The songs are definitely my favorite part of the VN, the one George sings at the campfire is definitely my favorite of those. However, I also really liked the old title screen theme, the cover of Forever Young, but it doesn't seem possible to access it anymore in-game. How can I hear it again, it was wonderful

Developer

Heheheh, thnk you DarkShadow! And sorry it took me so long to answer, days have been CRAZY.

I'm actualy planning to add a music room so you can listen the original songs of the game (I'd love to add the others but, you know, I have to be careful with the copyrights). 

Seth me rompiste con tu VN jajaja, me dolio muchisimo la historia pero me encanto, saque un buen final

Me gustaron mucho todos los personajes, bellisimos todos ^^, como yo soy una persona un poco directa, me aburria un poco que lucas fuera tan lento, pero estuvo LEJOS de ser un deal breaker.

Me gusto mucho y te deseo lo mejor en futuras actualizaciones y futuros proyectos

PD: conocí tu VN por naokycoopergames, por si tenías curiosidad o algo

Developer

Awww sorry jejejej. Muchas gracias por leer Buscadorocu.

Si, hay una delgada línea entre crear expectación y ansiedad (de la mala), me alegra saber que no lo hice tan mal XD. Muchas gracias por tus buenos deseos.

Y definitivamente me gusta saber que la conociste gracias a Naoky! jejeje nwn

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Just finished the game and wanted to let you know that I absolutely loved it - the amount of work that went into this is amazing, and very much appreciated! All of the characters are absolute sweethearts and so lovable - especially George!


P.S. I absolutely respect that you've opted not to go the NSFW route like many other VNs - but I will say that the constant hints about George's...assets... make me more than a little curious. And that frontal shot of him in the shower was an absolute tease!

Developer

Hahahahha, yeah sorry, I've commented in other places that I wanted to make a point. That I didn't write the VN with horny thoughts, I wrote it with love. That's why I decided not to include nudes or things like that, since, from my point of view, things like sassy moments or nsfw moments should not really be... mundane. Not when two people love each other. For me "poetry" would be a better word to describe those moments. And I think i made the effort to show that.

Not that everyone has to agree, I know hahaha. Still... point made I guess. 

Thank you for playing Literarybear :3

Ah, sorry! I didn't mean to come across that way. I actually completely agree with you in that making this a typical NSFW VN would have taken away from the mood and feel that you were going for - your choice ultimately makes this game a lot more memorable and impactful. :)

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By God though...i have never been more frightened while laughing the next moment and then crying like crazy thereafter. I got this game on a whim and i have been playing it for the last 3 days and it is simply beautiful. The writing is phenomenal. I started the game late one night and honestly i was so fucking scared after the first nightmare scene that i was actually anxious. The childish banter and jokes made me laugh so much at one point my husband looked at me like i was losing my mind. And the emotions everything conveyed is again just... beautiful. The musical aspect was so great and as someone that really really reallllly appreciates good writing and pacing this was beyond a treat for me. Thank you for putting yourself into such a wonderful game so that we can lose ourselves in it too. I just finished chapter 15 and i just couldn't wait a second longer to comment on what a amazing work of art this is. And making it a free project makes so grateful as a broke student that needs to be distracted from how utterly fucked up the world can be. I really wish you all of the happiness in the world and hope to see many more projects from you. 


Ps. The revengers bit had me spit out my glass of wine. I just couldn't deal reading that. 


So nooooooooooooooow again..


THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU SO MUCH! 

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Owwww thank you nwn. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. I do enjoy well written stories, and it's still makes me smile to know the fact that I actually managed to get other people smile too. 


Yes, world can be pretty fuked* up hahahaha, but there's still Beauty 💙. 


Thank you again! nwn

GEORGE SO CUTE 

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HE IS, RIGHT? XD

The VN was just amazing, I binge read the entire thing because I couldn't stop thinking about it lol

I am a native Spanish speaker but I read the novel in English instead. It is somehow very awkward for me to play a video game in my own language so I always default to English. Language wise I felt that the game was pretty great. Yes, true, there were a couple of mistranslations and a few untranslated words here and there but it honestly did not feel that the text was translated. I could have sworn it was written directly in English, really. 

The writing itself was brilliant - the characters, the ambience, the world building, the pining, the plot itself, the cliffhangers at the end of every chapter... there are many many parts of the story that were handled really well, you honestly did an amazing job. I even praised you aloud when I got to the warning before the ugly nightmare, it was very considerate of you.

I would like to share my opinion on two topics that I did not feel so good about: the pacing of the story in the third arc and the choices throughout the game. 

At some points the third arc was moving too slowly. It is also partly on me because I binge read the entire thing, so fatigue was inevitable. I also get that the feeling was somewhat intentional, as that's how any important event that will take place in a very specific date feels. However instead of building on this anxiety that the characters themselves are feeling I felt that I was losing little by speeding up my reading to reach the finale sooner. Johnny's comic relief was a very welcome surprise and managed to keep my interest in the story until the climax. My recommendation to avoid this is to double down on the angst and try to achieve the same, wonderful results you got in the nightmare sequences.

Another thing that somewhat irked me was the irrelevance of some important choices. Yes, there are no choices in a traditional book, and it is perfectly fine to force the plot to go in the direction that you need - it is a valid tactic, and I got the feeling that you largely succeeded at it. I can give you 2 examples of where you used this resource masterfully: taking Donnald's money or the replies while being muffled at the mall. 

Those irrelevant choices work perfectly, because they are related to actions outside the main character's control. Yes, you can refuse to take the money, but of course he will not be happy about it! And even if the choice was made relevant and the money stayed with Donnald, it still has no relevance whatsoever for the rest of the plot. Being given a choice that does not matter is okay when the result does not matter either, or when the circumstances escape our control anyway.

Conversely, I distinctly remember one event where I was not happy with the execution - whether to pick up or not Robert's call. This choice is purely made by Lucas, and it's one that majorly affects the plot. The issue is, no matter what you pick, the plot must move forward in a specific way for the story to work as planned. At least for me as a player, I would rather continue with the planned storyline (as it would happen in a traditional book) as opposed to being given an irrelevant choice. I can tell you that my exact feelings during that part were "yo, why do you even ask me then??". 

In contrast, I want to draw attention to another prompt that happens at the end of the game - the relationship status between the siblings. Following the previous logic, I would expect my choice to not have any impact (since, well... it's their choice, not Lucas'), yet it does. Fair enough, don't get me wrong - it's near the end of the game and offers the player a way to shape the ending to their tastes, but that's precisely the point that bugged me as a player - it did not happen all game long, why is my choice now suddenly impactful?

I think my favourite part of the entire novel was just the characters and how they interact between themselves. Alice spits facts every time she appears, Gaby is just so relatable, Hamil and Johnny made the VN fun for me and Laura reminded me very strongly of my own older sister. I liked all the characters, which also includes the final boss.

You honestly did a great job of showing the human side of all the characters in the game (even the minor ones), clearly showcasing their strenghts and flaws, allowing them to redeem themselves somehow during the novel. Contrarily, the final boss has barely been given any positive traits aside from one, which I greatly valued - brilliant manipulation skills. It is not an easy task to convince an entire room of a lie, which was carefully planned from start to finish. It is even more scary when you realise that the only weak point in the entire scheme was the final boss' tendency to overspeak in the monologues.

Anecdotically, when the segments with the therapist and the criminal were presented, I tried to be crafty with my responses. I thought that she would be insulted at my insinuations that she's not being professional, but turns out that by trying to be sneaky and persuasive, I overdid it and reached the bad ending. It was a nice touch, and I appreciated it. 

Regarding the relationship between Lucas and George, I want to comment a few things. I originally started reading the VN for the romance, but by the end I was not even that interested in it any more - other aspects of the game had caught my attention by then. The entire relationship was described with luxurious detail and good pacing - I enjoyed the pining quite a lot myself. That said, while the characters work well together in a relationship and Lucas is a good protagonist, even if he did not feel particularly relatable.

I am going to be honest and admit that I did not even listen to the songs. I am used to read while listening to my own music, so in VNs I always mute everything. For the art I am afraid I cannot give useful feedback either - I have never been too interested in the visual arts. Apologies for that.

Again, I really liked the story and the fact that it's openly shared, which are my two main driving forces for writing such a long review. I apologise if I have been blunt with my phrasing somewhere, as I can assure you that it was not intended.

If you have any other novels (visual or not) planned or in the works, be assured that I will read them once released.

IS THERE A PATR3ON I CAN SUPPORT!?!?!

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I don't really have one, and like I said in the main page (I think it was in the main page) I don't really wanted to get payed for this... But if you really want to help, share it! hahaha, share this story so more people can read it. That would  be a great help nwn

Honestly surprised at how much depth this vn had its got a very good plot imo