Great stuff, really appreciated your ability to create the world.  To create the people in space, it was excellently done!

I enjoyed it quite a bit! I think the change of point of view from Belendir to Rissien halfway through the scene was a bit disorienting, but that's probably easily by adding a break to indicate the change in perspective/scene.

Your ability to describe the environment was excellent. I felt like I was very easily able to imagine exactly what the scene looks like. Well told story overall as well. I enjoyed it!

It went fast, a little confusing though to keep track of who is doing what.

Interesting read, though it wasn't always clear who's doing what.

it took two readings but I love the action in this story. It was quick and brutal. I also like the characterization. Like how you showed that beledir never really trusted the dark elves.