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Definitely one of the more uniquely told stories. Thank you for putting the link in the comments! Glad I was able to read and rate it

Thanks! 

I agree, but it says in her description that she is an orphan, so figured I would throw it im there to tie it into the actual character. Thanks for the feedback!

Well done! Loved the ending. Wasn't expecting the positivity 

Thanks! I was going to write an original character first, but decided to go based off the new campaign. I will likely end up writting an original character next time

Your ability to describe the environment was excellent. I felt like I was very easily able to imagine exactly what the scene looks like. Well told story overall as well. I enjoyed it!

Very clear story telling. I thoroughly enjoyed it

Thank you! I appreciate the kind words snd the feedback. I feel like it is really rushed and wished I had 3 pages, but that isn't on brand for OPR lol

Incredible 🤣

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it

Loved it! Great ending

Very interesting that this was essentially a reimagined version of the Bible story. Well written and great ending!

Very interesting formatting. It was easy to follow and felt very immersive. Well done!

VERY well written. I really felt Arkan's desperation and subsequent dissapointment. One of my favorites so far.

My God dude (or chick). If you wrote a whole book, I would buy it. It would be criminal if this submission doesn't win. 5 stars across the board. 

Very unique writting a poem. Very well written too!

First off, incredible title. Most creative I have seen so far. As for the story, it was very well written. I loved how much you captured Orc energy and mindset. You stuck to the theme too, but I would advise against using the exact theme word for word at the end. Great story! 

Well written other than a couple grammatical errors. Great world building, and you did stick to the theme. However, nit to be rude, but it does feel like a cop-out to have the name of the story, the beginning of the story, and then end of the story, all be the theme word for word. Nevertheless, well written!

there isn't a download for the story 😬 Hopefully you can add it now since you at least had a submission

Holy crap, 10/10 as far as story and writting are concerned. Do you write often? This is my 5th story reviewing, and it is by far the most well written. Loved the ending too.

You got me feeling sympathy for an aligator man lol. Well done! Loved the names too. Did you come up with them, or are they actual character names? I'm not too familiar with the Starhosts

Loved the concept and it was well executed. As Grizlibier mentioned, I too felt like there were a few too many characters to follow in such a short time, but nevertheless, it was a great shortstory! 

Awesome story! I love how you are able to make us connect with Rookie and feel like we understand what kind of a person he is, in such a short story. Well done!

Loved this! Very different than I had expected it to go. Well written as well