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It flowed really well, I read it twice because the first time I was sort of confused why things ended they way they did. But I really like the writing style.

It was complicated, I like that you went for a grand scale but that limited word count was tough. 

This was a quick read. You really just go along with the main character right away. And the ending was a surprise, a really good set up. 

It was great, I enjoyed reading about how things just weren’t going to work out for them. It could be fleshed out into something really funny I think.

I really like that you portrayed a vampire as crappy middle management. He reminds me of #2 movie villains that think they’re smarter than their boss and then they fail.

I did too, I ended up sending it to my Notes App and it was a Word document. It looks like it maybe a little longer than expected? But I don’t know why the website is flagging it either?

Very well written, I enjoyed it a lot.

I enjoyed that it read like a screen play, well done.

It went fast, a little confusing though to keep track of who is doing what.

I liked it but I felt that the characters just flipped without any warning because there wasn’t much set up. They were there, then they just weren’t without any reason until a reveal that seemed a little flat. However, the twist at the end with the other character was good. I just wish I had been fleshed out more, but 500-1000 words aren’t much to work with.

A story where the rats sort of end up as the good guys in the end. That is  welcome and original.

Really good at looking back, it’s the only story I’ve read that has been “after” the plan. I enjoyed it.

I like this one a lot, it felt like if the higher levels of government in Star Ship Troopers was a weekly procedural drama with cliffhangers.

I like how the Dwarf was pragmatic, using the robots and not having one sided opinions about even other Dwarves.

This was great, I enjoyed the simple yet really smart use of every word. It felt like nothing was over used or wasted.

Thanks, that’s what I was going for👍

I don’t see many Prime Brothers stories. It was a fresh take on what could have been really a stale subject due to certain model/game companies over use of similar style characters. I really enjoyed it.

Really good work. I could see the main character being played by a sleep deprived coked up Jeff Goldbloom

I thought it was nice and to the point. I always like the Rats. 

I liked the way it was written I was confused until more than halfway in though.