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A jam submission

The Flight of the ElbertsonView project page

A submission for the OPR Writing Jam #8
Submitted by Neravin — 1 hour, 38 minutes before the deadline
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Results

CriteriaRankScore*Raw Score
Overall#24.1254.125
Adherence to the Theme#44.0834.083
Flow & Clarity#44.0424.042
Concept & Originality#44.2504.250

Ranked from 24 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.

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Congratulations on placing in the top 3 of OPR Writing Jam #8! To claim your prize, please reach out to us on Patreon.

Submitted

This is a cracking read.

I like the point of view of a faction normally not considered the good guys (depending on your point of view) talking front and centre.

Good stuff!

Submitted

Loved it! And very happy to see Ratmen Clans get some love.

Submitted

Well I wasn't planning to make a ratmen army anytime soon BUT NOW HERE WE ARE! Great story. Really enjoyed it.

Submitted

Very glad we didn't get a Secret of NIHM reference once the captain's name was mentioned, otherwise agree it was an original take on the rats as virtuous protagonists and glimpses of how they see enemies or allies, though the thematic use might have been more 'things just keep getting worse' versus difficult choices :)  

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A riveting and atmospheric space opera. The story effectively captures the essence of being caught "Between a Rock and a Hard Place," with the crew facing a dire situation and having to make heart-wrenching choices. The use of the rat race as protagonists gives it a unique twist.

Submitted

Unflinching prose, excellent flow and a spotlight on the darling Rats of the universe. What’s not to love?

Submitted

Very ratty narrative... No... NarRATive... Okay, I'll stop. Interesting take on the Rat peeps in all. I got to see the BB's as bad guys again which I also really love. Great stuff!

Submitted

I really enjoyed this one - I'm a stickler for grammar, and there were no issues to ruin the flow and take me out of the (excellent) story. You did a great job introducing and developing Jezra in only a thousand words!

Submitted

Wow. Not much to pick at on this one. Great little story with a clever conclusion. This one will be hard to top.