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Changing Winds: A Jackals Story's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Flow & Clarity | #5 | 3.909 | 3.909 |
| Overall | #13 | 3.833 | 3.833 |
| Concepts & Originality | #14 | 4.000 | 4.000 |
| Adherence to Theme | #29 | 3.591 | 3.591 |
Ranked from 22 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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I liked the setting. Good story telling.
Great pacing, great characters, great prose. The demon's appearance at the end would've felt a little deus ex machina like, but you foreshadowed it well by having the shaman be uneasy about the temple in general. All in all great story.
thanks a lot!
Wow. Havoc Sibling Rivalry... Another great cinematic tale.
always love reading about the jackals, and it was nice to see a take on there culture
Thank you!
A fellow Jackals enthusiast :D very nicely done, I really liked this one.
Thanks a lot! Now if I could only sit down and paint mine 😂
You and me both, friend. You and me both.
I enjoyed your description of the jackals and their shamanhood training. I love how Grisha seems like a flat character but her feeling power and the god telling her that it was her fault hinted at her true nature.
Thanks!
I really liked this, even as a familiar tale you put fresh life into it and the imagery of something snail-like tackling another is an unexpected juxtaposition of expectations.
Thanks so much! Glad you enjoyed it.
I enjoyed this story a lot - it felt like you made really efficient use of your space, your characters, and your dialogue, and the end result left me wanting more.
Thanks so much!
Part of me would've liked the shaman to survive, only for him to realize what sort of deal she had struck and then have the final controntation be between these two, but no way that would've fit the word limit. Really enjoyed it as is. Made for a very good read.
Thanks! That’s a really cool idea to add some real character conflict. Definitely was feeling the squeeze from the word limit!
Excellent example of "show, don't tell." Loved it.
Thank you! The word limit was a real challenge!