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her body unswept by laughter.'s itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Creativity | #9 | 4.206 | 4.206 |
| Sound | #32 | 3.651 | 3.651 |
| Simplicity | #53 | 3.937 | 3.937 |
| WOWIE! (Overall) | #69 | 3.413 | 3.413 |
| Visuals | #135 | 3.143 | 3.143 |
| Fun | #135 | 3.095 | 3.095 |
| Topic | #160 | 2.873 | 2.873 |
Ranked from 63 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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I was confused but at the same time I like it, I got to dance with my reflection hahah
glad you enjoyed! I'll keep the confusion feedback on mind for future projects -- seems to be a reoccurring theme! Thank you for your feedback
edit: what would make it less confusing?
Nice, I felt like it was kinda visual novel like in aspects as I tried to piece together a story as I went. I'm not sure if hat was the intention, but could possibly be a thing you go down.
Great work!
Thanks for your feedback! It wasn't quite my intention (honestly was running around trying to figure out what was happening lol) but i'm glad it came together that way — for future updates i'm definitely going to try and make it more like a visual novel like you described!! thanks so much for playing and providing feedback!!
i tried to play your game but it wouldn't run on my computer (im using a mac). please lmk if you know any ways i could get it to run on a mac and i'd love to check out your work!
Not usually the type of game I like, but its well done! Nice music and colors, very relaxing. Well done.
thanks for your feedback!!
Interesting, but it's a little hard to understand...
thanks for your feedback!!
edit: i only have access to a mac at the moment but your game looks super fun — wish i could play it!
edit: what would make it less confusing?
I wasn't sure what I was going into when I first played.
I'll definitely have to play it again with a clear mind.
thanks for giving it a shot! can i ask you how your experience was/why a "clear mind" would be better to play through?
I just was tired and didn't really pay a lot of attention to the text at first. Then I realized I was ruining the experience by doing so.
thanks for playing!! i know it's a bit weird
Well, I was not sure at all what I was supposed to do, but I suppose such is the nature of such a lovely poetic type game. I quite like the idea but, lack of understanding had some drawbacks to fun factor but, the enjoyment came from the very intriguing text. Great atmosphere.
thanks for your feedback, i'll keep that "fun factor" in mind!! appreciate you for engaging with my work :)
Totally enthralled by this. Had to give it a few plays :)
Thanks for playing it!!
What have I just played??? *confused noises intensifiy*
It was... something. It was ART! It's the most original and creative submission so far.
5/5 creativity... NO, 500/5 creativity... NO!!!
WOWIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE/5 Creativity! NOOO!!!
'P' 'L' 'U' 'C' 'K' 'W'O'W'I'E'E'E'E'E'E
her body unswept by laughter, reaching as a dialed moon.
Ikalumbabam??? Is this the word in the song? What does it mean. It sounds amazing!
Anyways, great submission. Good job!
awww thanks so much for your support!! i appreciate you SO much!
the song is a love song, goes:
manang biday, ilukatmo man
‘Ta bintana ikalumbabam
which translates to:
older sister[1] biday[2], open it
the window, open the window (so we can talk)
picture: serenading an amore from their yard. bintana is window, and i'm not entirely sure the grammar of Ilocano but ikalumbabam is (i think lol) a morphologically complex verb meaning "to open and lean on the window sill" (like ilukatmo man) just including other information (tense, aspect, focus, etc) and possibly having undergone some phonetic transformations as well.
[1] "older sister" is not a perfect translation of manang, i use it in my family to refer to any woman older than me, it's more of a gendered honorific if anything.
[2] "biday" i think is a name
thanks so much for listening and asking!
<3 <3 <3
Nice and relaxing; the sound is excellent. I really enjoyed the 'p' 'l' 'u' 'c' 'k' moment with the 5 characters - that really pulled me in felt like I was plucking flower pedals. :)
Thanks so much for playing and providing feedback! <3
Really cool and calming.
An excellent game with great atmoshphere! I love this game!
Keep up the great work!
Yay! Thanks so much!
I love it! Great addition to this jam. Really poetic and calming, Great Job!
Aww thank you!
Cool and artsy. So far the only game to make me dance so it's pretty special in my book.
Ha, glad it got you moving!! Thanks for playing :)
Confusion on plating this game at the same is something else.
But it's different.
thanks for playing!
Very cool experience! If you continue working on it maybe you can had more effects that change with the poem (like ambient particle falling petals effects), or maybe some artistic scene transitions/ color changes. Great job submitting a game~ Please check out my browser game when you can.
wow, that's such a great idea!!! thank you! i'll check out your game now :)
I absolutely loved this! The moment I saw the thumbnail and name I knew it would be special and I had to check it out.
There were many little great gags in there like the philosophically logical explanation why flowers are liars or the error message containing even more poetry... the dance section. So great!
And then there are many moments where the words are arranged just right to create something awe inspiring.
Please do make more of this, it's really great and very different :)
wow, thanks so much!! i really appreciate your feedback
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It is the most original game I saw so far, completely different from the rest of the games I tried. Amazing and super inspiring.
wow! thank you so much
I actually really love this. It's a nice break from all the other more in your face games others (myself included) have made ^^
yay! glad you enjoyed it!!
I cannot express my confusion from when i played this game
Haha BIG MOOD!! thanks for checking it out :)
No problem, it would be cool if you could try my game https://llamadev-games.itch.io/test-slime
just did :)
Thanks :)
Really atmospheric game. :o Never have played anything alike so that was a cool new experience. :D
Thanks for playing!!
Very interesting! Simple, clean and well made. A masterpiece.
Aww, thank you!