I love the juxtaposition between the intelligence side of the main character, and the strength side of both the titan and the father of Antonnio. I also thought the end with strength winning the battle but intelligence used to survive losing to be an interesting dynamic.

I did expect more though from someone called the Strategist to pull out something perhaps more unorthodox in an attempt to win the battle. Even stranger devices or traps, perhaps.

I like your story, and you definitely get props for actually making a coat of arms to accompany it! 

I do think it would fit the theme a little better if Antonio had done something unexpected or clever--it kind of felt like he tried to do a straight up fight, then ran away when it turned out the enemy was stronger than him.

Interesting story, really liked the background you gave about the characters family and crest

I really like the concept and originality. It follows the theme quite well, also ending with intelligence losing a fight to strength (thought it appears to be a temporary victory)

My main problem was definitely the grammar. Takes me out of the story some.

The ending also felt a little rushed.

But I loved the world building!

I like where it was going and appreciate the characterization, but found the flow/clarity seemed like it may had been through a language translator maybe that caused some of the word issues?

Now that the story dug itself out of obscurity, it was pretty alright. It held onto some parts of the theme well, there was a lot of intelligence at play. This definitely needed a double or triple check with the grammatical errors, and words left over from a sentence that was discarded (I noticed it because I do the same exact thing). Overall, well done.

It's a good read and I like how well your characterized the protagonist! The only things that might need improvement is the flow and fixing misplaced words.

Hi guys!, The pdf was actually uploaded but by mistake I ticked the hide this file button. Should be available to read now