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Lend Me Your Ears's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Concept & Originality | #8 | 4.167 | 4.167 |
| Overall | #26 | 3.292 | 3.292 |
| Flow & Clarity | #30 | 2.875 | 2.875 |
| Adherence to the Theme | #31 | 2.833 | 2.833 |
Ranked from 24 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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I loved the idea of a story being told while there is other things going on. The fact that the story is told about a certain individual from a certain race, and then the reveal is fantastic. I also really liked the use of language and themes within the story being told by the main character that was a contrast to the action going on.
I enjoyed this playful and interesting take on the [spoiler redacted] and their unique way of seeing the galaxy around them. Thank you!
I think the introduction could have used some polish - at first I thought you'd changed Angertold's gender without realizing it, and only later did I clue in to the fact that "her ship" was not referring to Angertold, but the object of his search. That may be a me problem though :P. An interesting and really quite charming read nonetheless!
Tweaked the paragraph spacing and BOOM! single side of a sheet.
Very unique story vibe entry and faction inclusion approach, can see Bard stumping for “Proposition Infinity”
the twist was indeed great! loved the concept too
Loved the twist!
Sad that it might be disqualified due to its length.
If you go in and edit out some of those double spaces between paragraphs, it might all fit on the same page.
I’d hate to see this not get a chance due to one small problem.
Excellent concept and very unique; however, I found the prose somewhat difficult to follow. You use a lot of long descriptions which I think would benefit from more punctuation. Love the description of the other species as "children"!
Interesting story. Probably needed more words to be told properly but cool idea. Like others i didn't really see the theme until after reading the composers comments. Maybe foreshadowing/signposting that better would have changed my engagement. I did like that it was a different story to others
An interesting tale, one that I appreciate existing in this roster. Whilst not being formatted correctly, nor having much to do with the theme of the jam. the idea of a robot that prowls the battlefield and attempts to tell its tale is refreshing in this line up we have.
As these stories are intended for one page, it was just a matter of formatting. Other than that im still unclear of the link to the main theme. Maybe having a little more context would help
I didn't want to just do a 'These guys are my favorites, so they beat the other guy cos they are Strong/Smart. Instead I wanted to draw parallels between Strong characters and Smart characters both as suitors for someone outside of combat (in his tale) and in combat, where in both cases these are not the only options.
Angertold himself never kills anyone in the story. Not because he can't, clearly he might be rather good at it... But he chooses not to, because for upon his own awakening to sentience he has concluded that this is something distasteful, where no one wins if it persists. As eventually everyone dies.
Oh man I really wanted to give you a glowing rating but I'm afraid you broke the most important rule... It had to fit on one page :pensive: It was wonderfully written and it captured how detached elves are from the rest of the universe incredibly well. Work on your formatting friend!
One sheet. A sheet that possesses... two sides.
Like, just wanted to note that this person ain’t trying to nitpick. It all fitting on one page is the rules of the Writing Jam, and the lack of following formatting may disqualify you, which would suck.
And I don't (didn't?) even like Elves. Imagine what I'd write with a Faction I do like?